Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram shows about the harvesting a sugar cane and process to make sugar.its almost taking one and half year. prepeqare the field with heavy machinery like tractors and then ready for seed process after that its take 12 to 18 months to growing up.when the fields are ready now its time to harvest. In the time of beggining people use manual hand made equipments and is time taking process. Now technology is change every thing you have heavy machinery to work fast and relaible in short time.after harvesting its time to crushing the sugar cane.crushing process take time and after crushing you have to prufying the juice with lime stone filter which is neglect the impurities.Then you have to boil the juiceat specific temprature in evaporator to make juice into syrup after that now its time to rotate in to rotating machine to seperate sugar crystals from syrup after the processing sugar is seperate in crystals from now you have to turn into drum for make it cool and dry
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from cultivation to the final product. However, the description is somewhat informal and lacks the analytical tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. While you identified the key stages, the explanation of the 'harvesting' section is slightly off-topic, as you focus on the history of manual versus mechanical labor rather than describing the process shown in the diagram. To improve, ensure you focus strictly on the steps provided in the visual data and use a more objective, descriptive tone. The overview is missing, which is a critical requirement for a high band score in Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of the process. The text is presented as a single block, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'after that', 'then'). There is a lack of transition between the cultivation phase and the manufacturing phase. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview of the process, and two body paragraphs detailing the specific stages. Using a wider variety of linking words such as 'subsequently', 'following this', and 'consequently' would significantly improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'prepeqare', 'prufying', and 'temprature'. Some word choices are imprecise or non-academic, such as 'growing up' instead of 'maturing' or 'neglect the impurities' instead of 'remove impurities'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You should focus on learning process-specific vocabulary like 'extraction', 'filtration', 'evaporation', and 'centrifugation' to describe technical diagrams more accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('its take', 'crushing process take time'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms ('is time taking process'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence construction. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many missing capital letters at the start of sentences and missing commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structure, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing the use of passive voice, which is essential for describing industrial processes.
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