Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The digram below displays that the process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The first step of making suger from suger can had planted a suger in soil and you had waited for 12 to 18 months.The socond step jad to harvest the sugar can after 12 or 18 months. Some people had harvested through own while some had cut through automatic harvester. The next step is crushing sugar canes in a sugarcane juice making machine whereas the juice pass through another step that had limestone filter that give us pure juice. The next step is to put the sugarcanes on fire and evaporate the water and they make juice syrup. The next step put this syrup in centrifuge machine they extract suger crystals from syrup. In the last there had a drying amd cooling process.

Overall the sugar canes pass through growing,harvesting,crushing,purifyjuice.evaporation,centrifuge and drying amd cooling and last the sugar had ready.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the process, from growing to the final product. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the process as a whole. While the stages are identified, the response fails to effectively highlight the key transitions or the nature of the process (e.g., it is a linear, multi-stage industrial process). The inclusion of personal pronouns like 'you' is inappropriate for an academic report, which should remain objective. The summary at the end is a list rather than a synthesis of the information, which limits the development of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into a brief introduction, a body paragraph, and a summary. However, the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures, such as starting multiple sentences with 'The next step'. Cohesive devices are limited and often used incorrectly or mechanically. Paragraphing is present but the overall progression of ideas feels disjointed. The transition between the harvesting stage and the industrial processing stages is abrupt, and the lack of varied linking words makes the text feel like a list of instructions rather than a cohesive report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'digram', 'suger', 'suger can', 'socond', 'jad', and 'amd'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process with precision. Words like 'making' and 'step' are used repeatedly, indicating a lack of variety. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of spelling mistakes and the limited range of technical terminology (e.g., using 'fire' instead of 'evaporation' or 'heating') prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures and contains frequent grammatical errors. There are significant issues with verb tense consistency, such as 'had planted' and 'had waited', which are inappropriate for describing a general process. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, for example, 'the juice pass' and 'there had a drying'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect comma usage. The lack of complex sentence structures and the high density of basic errors significantly impact the clarity of the writing.

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