Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the process of making sugar from sugarcane .

overall, sugar is obtained by following the main 7 steps of the process , from growing sugarcane till drying and cooling of sugar crystals.

In the beginning of the process, firstly sugarcane is growing by taking the period of 12 to 18 months . In the next step grown sugarcanes is harvested by two methods : 1. with the help of vehicle and 2 . manually cutting large sugarcane by sharp instrument . After harvesting , sugarcanes is transferred into machine where crushing is done and juice is obtained. Following the process of purifying juice from limestone filter , Now excessive heat produce into evaporator the juice becomes a syrup , By obtaining sugar crystals in the process of centrifuge where it separates the syrup, Finally separated sugar crystals put into large container where the drying and cooling of sugar is done.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from the growth of the cane to the final drying and cooling. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the key features, such as the transition from raw material to refined product. While the steps are identified, the response would benefit from a more analytical approach, grouping stages logically rather than just listing them. The inclusion of '1.' and '2.' within the text is informal and detracts from the academic tone required for Task 1. To improve, ensure the overview highlights the transformation process more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'In the beginning', 'In the next step', and 'Finally'. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the logical flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect the stages of the process more fluidly. Paragraphing is present, but the overall structure feels a bit disjointed due to the reliance on simple transition markers.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'harvested', 'purifying', 'evaporator', and 'centrifuge' used correctly. However, there is a lack of variety and precision. Some phrasing is slightly awkward, such as 'excessive heat produce into evaporator', which indicates a limited range of collocations. The vocabulary is functional but does not demonstrate the flexibility or sophistication required for a higher band. To improve, focus on using more precise verbs and nouns related to industrial processes, and avoid informal formatting like numbering within the paragraph.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'sugarcane is growing' should be 'sugarcane is grown', and 'grown sugarcanes is harvested' contains a subject-verb agreement error. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and punctuation, such as the unnecessary spaces before periods and the awkward phrasing 'Now excessive heat produce into evaporator'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to limit the score. A greater focus on subject-verb agreement and sentence construction is needed.

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