Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illustrate how sugar is made from sugar cane, which includes total seven steps to manufacture.
Overall, sugar is consist total seven steps to manufacture sugar fron sugarcane with the help of machinery and manually processes. Manual process include harvesting sugar canes, where as machine process involves seperating sugar fron syrup.
Firstly, sugar canes take a time for proper grown. It will take 1 or 1.5 year for proper grown. after that sugar cane is harvested by both manually and machinary equipments. Then next step is crusing the sugar cane to grab the fine juice
Once the juice has been produced, the purifying process phase begins. This stage involves machinery equipment for the filtering sugar juice. Furthermore, the next step is heating the filtered juice to convert juice into syrup and the last step is seperating the sugar from the syrup with the help of centrifuge. At the end, final process is drying and cooling the sugar from the crystals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the sugar production process, from harvesting to the final product. However, the overview is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear summary of the key features. The description of the stages is generally accurate, but some details are slightly inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that the process involves 'manually processes' for separating sugar from syrup, which is not supported by the diagram. To improve, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant aspects of the process rather than just restating the number of steps, and ensure all descriptions align strictly with the provided visual information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the logical flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'At the end', they are sometimes used in a mechanical way. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the lack of sophisticated linking between sentences makes the text feel a bit disjointed. Improving the variety of transition words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'take a time for proper grown' instead of 'take time to mature' and 'grab the fine juice' instead of 'extract the juice'. Additionally, there are spelling errors like 'seperating' and 'machinary'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise technical vocabulary related to industrial processes and ensure correct spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'sugar is consist total seven steps', 'sugar fron sugarcane', and 'manual process include harvesting'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and proofreading for common errors would significantly improve your grammatical accuracy.
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