Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given picture illustrates the manufacturing process for making sugar cane. It explains how the sugar is produced from sugar cane with the help of a diagram.

The diagram demonstrates method of manufacturing process of sugar cane to obtain sugar from it. This process is divided into nine steps namely, growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice, evaporator, centrifuge, drying and cooling.

The first step is to grow sugar cane on a farm for 12-18 months and harvest it either with machines or hands. Then put the harvested sugar cane into a crushing machine which converts the solid sugar cane into juice. The next step is to purify the obtained juice with the help of a limestone filter and transfer it into an evaporator where the heat of evaporator converts filtered juice becomes syrup. After that the obtained syrup is transferred into a centrifuge which separates sugar crystals from the syrup. At last, the separated sugar is dried and cooled and here the process of production sugar from sugar cane is completed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all stages of the process, from growing to the final drying and cooling. However, the overview is weak; it merely repeats the prompt's information rather than highlighting the key features of the process, such as the transition from raw material to refined product. While the steps are listed, the report lacks a clear summary of the main trends or stages. To improve, you should provide a concise overview after the introduction that identifies the primary transformation stages, such as the initial preparation, the extraction phase, and the final refining phase.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, following the chronological order of the diagram. Paragraphing is used, though the second paragraph is quite dense and could be split to improve readability. Cohesive devices are present (e.g., 'The first step', 'Then', 'The next step', 'After that'), but they are somewhat mechanical and repetitive. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the transition between the different stages of the process feels more fluid rather than just a list of sequential actions.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing for a clear description of the process. You use technical terms correctly, such as 'centrifuge', 'evaporator', and 'limestone filter'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there is unnecessary repetition of phrases like 'the obtained juice' and 'the obtained syrup'. To improve, aim for more precise synonyms or varied ways to describe the movement and transformation of the material, such as 'extracting', 'filtering', or 'crystallizing'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'the heat of evaporator converts filtered juice becomes syrup', which is syntactically incorrect. Another error is 'the process of production sugar', which should be 'the process of producing sugar'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading of verb forms and prepositional usage. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures would also help improve the score.

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