Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process for sugar which was produce from sugar cane.

Overall, this is 7 stage man-made process. Which starts from growing baby plants of sugar cannes and harvesting them at the last by different process sugar was delivered.

In first, the baby sugar cannes was growing then all plants are harvest at Time of 12 to 18 months. After that all sugar cans was added into crushing machine which produce fresh juice and this juice was add into limesione filter to purifying juice. In contrast, juice was pore into evaporator which made juice to syrup with help of heat.

At the end, the syrup was added to centrifuge to sparates sugar ceystals from syrup and after that the syrup adding into drying and cooling chamber after all this process the sugar was produced respectliy

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the process, but it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the key stages are identified, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks the necessary detail to fully develop the summary. The overview is present but could be more effectively integrated. Because the response is under-length, the development of the information is limited, preventing a higher band score. To improve, ensure all steps are described with sufficient detail and that the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for a comprehensive overview and clear reporting of the process.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into a logical sequence, following the steps of the diagram. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical (e.g., 'In first', 'After that', 'At the end'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the structure is quite basic. The flow of information is generally clear, but the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the progression feel a bit disjointed. To improve, try using a wider variety of transition signals and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, which will help the reader follow the process more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There are several spelling errors, such as 'cannes' instead of 'canes', 'limesione' for 'limestone', 'pore' for 'poured', and 'sparates' for 'separate'. Additionally, some word choices are awkward, such as 'baby plants' and 'respectliy'. The range of vocabulary is limited to the basic terms provided in the prompt. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology related to industrial processes and ensure accurate spelling of technical terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'sugar cannes was growing', 'all sugar cans was added') and tense usage (e.g., 'which was produce'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of full stops and capital letters. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent tense usage when describing a process. Practicing the construction of error-free complex sentences will also help raise your score.

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