Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates various stages of how sugar is manufactured using sugar cane.

Overall, the whole manufacturing process is completed in seven different stages from growing the sugar cane to drying and cooling. This huge task is mostly completed by mechanical process.

At the initial stage, 1 to 1.5 years grown sugar canes are choosen to make sugar. After selection, these need to be harvested. This step can be done in two different ways, either by using a harvesting tractor or manually. Then, the crushing stage begins to extract the juice out of the sugar cane sticks.

In the next phases, the juice is at first purified in the limestone filter following the evaporation in a cylinder shaped jar which is actually heated in fire. The evaporation step helps the juice to turn into syrup so that the sugar crystals can be separated in the centrifuger. Lastly, the crystals are strored in a jar to dry and cool the finished product, which is sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all stages of the process, from the growth of the sugar cane to the final product. You have successfully identified the main features and provided a clear overview. However, the description of the process could be more precise. For instance, you mention 'heated in fire' for evaporation, which is a bit informal and imprecise compared to the diagram's indication of heat. Additionally, while you mention the two methods of harvesting, you could have integrated the comparison more smoothly into the flow of the process. Overall, you have addressed the requirements of the task well, providing a logical summary of the provided visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that follow the chronological order of the process. You use cohesive devices such as 'At the initial stage', 'After selection', 'In the next phases', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader through the steps. While the paragraphing is appropriate, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is clear, and the information is presented in a way that is easy to follow. To reach a higher band, ensure that the connection between sentences is more varied and less reliant on simple sequence markers.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'manufactured', 'harvested', 'purified', and 'centrifuger'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as '1 to 1.5 years grown sugar canes' (which should be 'sugar canes that have grown for 1 to 1.5 years') and 'strored' (a spelling error). The phrase 'cylinder shaped jar' is also slightly imprecise for an industrial process. To improve, try to incorporate more precise technical vocabulary related to industrial manufacturing and ensure accurate spelling throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'choosen' (should be 'chosen'), 'following the evaporation' (should be 'followed by evaporation'), and 'heated in fire' (should be 'heated over a fire'). Some phrasing is slightly awkward, such as 'This huge task is mostly completed by mechanical process'. Despite these errors, the grammar does not impede communication. To achieve a higher score, focus on improving the accuracy of your verb forms and prepositions, and aim for more complex sentence structures that are error-free.

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