Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the production process for making sugar from sugarcane.

Overall, the whole cycle consists of seven stages. The process begins with the cultivation of sugarcane and ends at the production of sugar crystals.

In the initial stage, farmers cultivate the crop of sugarcane and wait for twelve to eighteen months to grow it up. Next, farmers harvest sugarcane through labor or by use of advanced agriculture machinery. Additionally, sugarcans then pass through a crushing machine to extract juice from them. The juice of sugarcane subsequently moves through a limestone filter for purification.

In the subsequent stage, purified juice of sugarcane then passes through an evaporator to turn the juice into syrup by the use of a heating process through flames from below. Moreover, syrup of sugarcane is then transferred to a centrifuge setup to separate the sugar crystals from the syrup. At the end, Suagr takes place in a big storage tank for drying and cooling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all stages of the process, from cultivation to storage. You have successfully identified the main features and provided a clear overview. However, the description of the process is somewhat mechanical and lacks a more analytical approach to the 'comparisons' requested in the prompt. For instance, you could have highlighted the transition from raw material to refined product more effectively. While the key stages are present, the development is slightly basic. To reach a higher band, ensure that you not only list the steps but also synthesize the information to show how the stages relate to one another in the overall manufacturing cycle.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction and a progression that follows the chronological order of the diagram. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the initial stages from the later refining stages. You use cohesive devices such as 'Next', 'Additionally', 'subsequently', and 'In the subsequent stage' to guide the reader. However, some of these transitions feel slightly repetitive or mechanical. To improve, try to vary your linking phrases and ensure that the flow between sentences is smoother, rather than relying on a list-like structure for each step of the process.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'cultivation', 'purification', 'evaporator', and 'centrifuge'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'grow it up' (which is redundant) and 'use of advanced agriculture machinery' (should be 'agricultural'). Additionally, 'Suagr' contains a spelling error. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. Focus on using more precise technical collocations and ensuring accurate spelling throughout your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'by use of' (which is clunky) and 'sugarcans' (incorrect pluralization). The phrase 'grow it up' is also grammatically awkward in this context. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Incorporating more varied complex sentence structures, such as passive voice constructions which are ideal for process descriptions, would also enhance your grammatical range.

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