Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The flow chart below represent the production process of making sugar from sugar cane .

Overall,producing a sugar from sugar cane is an seven stage process,which starts from growing suger cane for about 12-18 months and end with drying and cooling sugar.

intially,the sugar canes are allowed to grow for 12 to 18 months and are harvested by people.after that, the sugar canes are crushed by crushing machines until its turn into liquid form like a juice.then,the juice is transfer into limestone fliter for the purification of jucie.

following the process, the juice are then transfer into the stove where its evaporate into syrup after melting.final stage include,sperateing sugar cystral from syrup

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. While you have identified the main stages of the process, the description is underdeveloped. You have missed key details from the diagram, such as the centrifuge stage and the final packaging or distribution. To improve, ensure you describe all steps shown in the diagram rather than omitting sections. Because the response is significantly under-length and lacks sufficient detail to fully cover the process, it does not meet the criteria for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into short paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the logical flow is hindered by the lack of sufficient detail and some mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'following the process' and 'final stage include' are used, but the transitions between sentences feel somewhat repetitive and basic. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus. The overall structure is present, but the lack of depth makes the progression feel disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'making', 'growing', and 'crushing'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'suger', 'intially', 'fliter', 'jucie', 'sperateing', and 'cystral', which distract the reader. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'extraction', 'purification', 'evaporation', and 'crystallization'. Focusing on accurate spelling and using more precise terminology will significantly improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the juice are then transfer') and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'its evaporate'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects, and using correct tense consistency. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect verb endings is essential.

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