Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The rendered diagram illustrates the steps involved in the process of production of sugar from sugarcane.

Overall, the process consisted total seven stages, where it from growing sugarcane in the field and ended upon the drying and cooling of sugar after the whole producer.

Initially, the sugarcane grown in the field which take a year to a half year time to be harvested. Subsquently. the yield of sugarcane harvested from the field with the help of workers and machines. After that, the sugar crushed to obtain the juice of the sugarcane for further procenn of production. Thereafter. collected juice purified with the limestone filter and thi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the task achievement score. Because the text is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, the overview is underdeveloped, and the process is not fully described. While the student attempts to identify the stages of the sugar production process, the failure to complete the task means that key features and comparisons are missing. To improve, you must ensure you cover all stages shown in the diagram and provide a complete, coherent summary that meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response shows some attempt at logical sequencing using transition words like 'Initially', 'Subsequently', and 'Thereafter'. However, the abrupt ending and the incomplete nature of the sentences hinder the overall flow. Paragraphing is not effectively utilized, and the mechanical use of cohesive devices does not compensate for the lack of a fully developed structure. The text lacks a clear progression because it stops before the process is finished, making it difficult to follow the logical development of the information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for describing a process, using terms like 'harvested', 'crushed', and 'purified'. However, there are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'total seven stages' (should be 'a total of seven stages') and 'procenn' (a spelling error). The range is limited, and the repetition of basic structures prevents the use of more sophisticated or precise terminology. To reach a higher band, focus on using more varied vocabulary related to industrial processes and ensure accurate spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the sugarcane grown in the field which take a year' (missing auxiliary verb 'is' and subject-verb agreement error) and 'the sugar crushed' (should be 'the sugarcane is crushed'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of periods instead of commas. The frequent errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense usage significantly lower the score for this criterion.

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