Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The picture below illustrates the information about production of sugar .The given process involves four major steps in formation of sugar.

The first step,starts with growing of sugar cane plantation in soil which can take about 12 to 18 months. The next step is to harvest the crop through special machinary for cutting sugar cane or by cutting it by hand through labour work. The machinary has an upper hand in this aspect as it is easy to harvest the crop within short period of time as compared to the work done by labour which is quite time taking and exhausting.

The third step is to crush these sugar canes through a crusher and extract the juice from them. Afterward, the juice is filtered specially through a limestone filter and taken to the Evaporator where juice is heated at high temperature and juice becomes thick and forms into a syrup.

The last step for manufacturing sugar involves the separating of sugar crystals from the syrup through Centrifuge in which the outward force pushes out crystals from the syrup. Then it is left for drying and cooling in large containers to make the sugar usabe in form of crystals for public.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all main steps of the sugar manufacturing process, starting from the cultivation of sugar cane through harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation, and finally centrifugation. Key features such as the duration of growth (12 to 18 months), methods of harvesting (machinery versus manual labor), and the specific actions of the limestone filter, evaporator, and centrifuge are accurately reported. Comparisons are also effectively integrated, notably contrasting the speed of mechanical harvesting with manual labor. The overview in the introduction clearly states that there are four major steps. The response satisfies all requirements of Task 1 by summarizing the essential information without omitting major stages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The text demonstrates a clear logical organization, following the linear progression of the diagram chronologically from cultivation to the final product. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct stages of the process, such as harvesting and processing. Cohesive devices like 'The first step', 'The next step', 'Afterward', and 'The last step' guide the reader smoothly through the sequence of events. However, referencing is occasionally imprecise, such as using 'Then it is left for drying' where the antecedent noun ('crystals' or 'sugar') could be more explicitly linked. Overall, the progression is coherent and easy to follow throughout.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student exhibits an adequate vocabulary range suitable for describing a technical process, employing topic-specific terms like 'cultivation', 'harvest', 'crusher', 'limestone filter', 'Evaporator', 'syrup', 'sugar crystals', and 'Centrifuge'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'growing of sugar cane plantation' instead of 'cultivating sugar cane', 'machinary has an upper hand', and making sugar 'usabe' (a spelling error). While less common lexical items are attempted, inaccuracies in word formation and spelling keep the response at a Band 6 level, though communication is never impeded.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, incorporating relative clauses ('soil which can take about 12 to 18 months') and participial phrases. There is good control over tense usage when describing a timeless cyclical or industrial process. However, several grammatical errors and punctuation slips occur, including missing articles ('production of sugar', 'through Centrifuge'), spacing errors before punctuation marks ('.The given'), and awkward phrasing like 'in which the outward force pushes out crystals from the syrup'. These errors are noticeable but do not impede the overall flow or understanding of the message.

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