Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram demonstrates the manufacturing method for developing sugar from sugar cane.

Starting from the first step which includes growing of sugar cane for 12-18 months which was carry forwarded by a step called harvesting. Moreover, farmers do the harvesting either by their hands or by machines. Moving forward, the third step was crushing the sugar cane through a machine and taking out the juice from it. Furthermore, the juice was purified using a limestone filter. In addition, the juice was then evaporated in a huge container to convert the juice into a syrup. In last second stage, syrup was centrifuged to remove sugar crystal from syrup. Lastly, the syrup goes under two processes known as drying and cooling.

Overall, the process of making sugar completes in seven stages which are easy and convinent. It takes a lot of time to complete a single cycle of manufacturing sugar from sugar cane.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully covers all the main steps in the sugar manufacturing process, from the initial growing and harvesting stages through crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and finally drying and cooling. The student provides a clear overview in the final paragraph, noting that the process comprises seven distinct stages. However, the description relies heavily on chronological sequencing ('Starting from', 'Moving forward', 'Furthermore', 'In addition') without offering deeper synthesis or comparisons between the manual and mechanical methods of harvesting shown in the diagram. Despite these minor limitations, all key features of the process are accurately identified and reported, satisfying the core requirements of Task 1.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The report exhibits a clear overall progression, guiding the reader logically through the seven stages of the manufacturing process from start to finish. Paragraphing is appropriately utilized to separate the main body description from the introductory and concluding statements. Cohesive devices are used throughout, such as 'Starting from the first step', 'Moving forward', 'In addition', and 'Lastly', although some transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive in structure. Referencing is generally clear, and the relationship between ideas is easy to follow, supporting a coherent reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully incorporating process-specific terms such as 'manufacturing method', 'harvesting', 'crushing', 'limestone filter', 'evaporated', 'syrup', 'centrifuged', and 'sugar crystal'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations, such as 'developing sugar' instead of 'producing sugar', 'carry forwarded' instead of 'followed', and 'by their hands' instead of 'by hand'. Additionally, the word 'convinent' in the conclusion contains a spelling error. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main points, but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as participial phrases ('Starting from the first step which includes...') and relative clauses. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward tense shifts. For instance, mixing past and present tenses ('which was carry forwarded' versus 'farmers do the harvesting') occurs throughout the text. Additionally, 'In last second stage' lacks a definite article, and 'goes under two processes' is an awkward collocation compared to 'undergoes'. While these errors do not impede overall communication, their frequency prevents the writing from achieving a higher band score.

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