Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THe process chart illustrates information about the prduction of making sugar from sugar cane.

OVerall, it is evident that there are many steps are involved in the manufacturing of sugar from sugara cane start with growing sugar cane and end up with drying and colling.

To begin with, the sugar cane growing till 12-18 months and after that it is harvesting by human and machine. The sugar cane crushing into machine start with sugar cane into machine and after crushing sugar cane and juice is produced and after that purifying juice into limestone filter.

Moving further, juice becomes syrup into evaporater and heated by heat. separates sugar crystals from syrup by Centrifuge. In the end of steps, sugar drying and colling and after that make sugar for using.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to describe the main steps in the manufacturing process of sugar from sugar cane, noting the stages from growing to drying and cooling. An overview is attempted, and major stages such as harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, and centrifuging are mentioned. However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 128 words. Furthermore, some descriptions are incomplete or unclear, such as 'sugar cane crushing into machine start with sugar cane into machine'. While the sequence of steps is generally followed, the lack of adequate length and undeveloped details prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The text is divided into four short paragraphs, which gives it a basic framework. Cohesive devices and transition markers such as 'To begin with', 'Moving further', and 'In the end of steps' are used to signal the progression of the process. However, logical organization is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences lack proper cohesion, leading to an overall choppy structure that prevents the response from achieving a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on words directly copied from the prompt, such as 'sugar cane', 'process chart', 'juice', and 'syrup'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'prduction' (production), 'sugara', and 'colling' (cooling). Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success ('evaporater', 'Centrifuge'), but spelling and morphological inaccuracies reduce the precision and naturalness of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writing relies heavily on simple sentences and fragments, with very limited control over complex grammatical structures. There are several grammatical errors, including missing verbs, incorrect voice usage, and preposition errors, such as 'there are many steps are involved', 'sugar cane growing till 12-18 months', and 'is harvesting by human and machine'. Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent, as seen in 'THe' and 'OVerall'. These errors frequently cause strain for the reader.

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