Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing process in every step in detail for making sugar from sugar cane.

The process started with growing suger canes. Suger canes takes 12-18 months to grown complete after that his harvesting by the advanced machine and by the worker it depends on the budget. In further process

suger canes crushed and truned into liquid juice with the help of crusher machine then use limestone filter to purification of the juice.

After that, the juice store in large container and the container placed on heat just to evaporat the juice and become syrup, then centrifuge machine use to saperates suger crystals from syrup. In the final step of the process the suger stored in large bucket for drying and cooling.

Overall, the manufacturing process started with growing sunger canes and end with drying and cooling sunger. The whole process complete in seven steps and the vital step was to crushing the suger canes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student attempts to cover all stages of the sugar manufacturing process, starting from growing and harvesting through to crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and finally drying and cooling. A basic overview is provided at the end of the text. However, there are notable limitations in task achievement: the response contains several inaccuracies regarding the visual details (for instance, stating that the juice is stored in a large container placed on heat to evaporate, whereas the diagram shows an evaporator over heat). Additionally, the development of some stages is brief and lacks precise reporting of the sequence and features shown in the diagram, leading to a band score of 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into three paragraphs, including an introduction and a concluding summary. Cohesive devices such as 'After that', 'In further process', and 'In the final step' are employed to guide the reader through the stages of the diagram. However, the organisation suffers from abrupt transitions and incomplete sentence structures, such as 'In further process suger canes crushed and truned into liquid juice'. Paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, and referencing between ideas is occasionally unclear or repetitive, restricting the score to 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, successfully using process-related terms such as 'manufacturing process', 'crushed', 'juice', 'limestone filter', 'syrup', and 'crystals'. However, there are persistent spelling errors throughout the response, including 'suger' instead of sugar, 'grown' instead of grow, 'truned' instead of turned, 'saperates' instead of separates, and 'sunger' instead of sugar. These lexical limitations and frequent spelling mistakes place the response firmly at band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains a mix of simple and attempted complex structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are numerous errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and missing articles or prepositions, such as 'Suger canes takes 12-18 months to grown complete after that his harvesting', 'then use limestone filter to purification', and 'the juice store in large container'. These frequent errors frequently impede fluency and cause difficulty for the reader, justifying a band score of 4.5.

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