Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given diagram illustrates the different stages involved in the sugar-making process from its raw material, which is sugarcane.

Overall, there are seven consecutive stages that starting with an agricultural production process, then harvesting, and lastly running a process in sugar-factory to produce a final product.

The process begins with growing sugarcane in agricultural land, which takes almost 1-1.5 years of time. In the next step, sugar canes cutting by the farmers and collected and transported with the tractor, and it bring to the factory for further process. These sugar canes are put into a machine for crushing and collecting sugarcane juice from sugar cane.

This sugarcane juice is transfered into a funnel shape of machinary (Limestone filter) for purifying the juice. The juice goes for heating process, in the following step, evaporation performed to convert juices into sugar syrup. In addition, centrifugation process helps separate crystals of sugar from the syrup of sugar. Finally, these crystals are going for drying and cooling to form a sugar, which become complete solid product from the liquid.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by providing an overview of the seven-stage manufacturing process of sugar from sugar cane. The main features are reported accurately, covering the agricultural phase, harvesting methods, crushing, purification via a limestone filter, evaporation, centrifugation, and finally drying and cooling. An overview is present in the second paragraph, outlining the progression from agriculture to the factory stage. However, the summary tends to rely heavily on literal step-by-step narration without fully synthesizing broader trends or key comparative elements between the manual and mechanical harvesting methods depicted in the diagram. Nevertheless, all core stages are identified and explained in logical sequence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response exhibits a clear logical organisation and progression throughout, moving sequentially from the beginning to the end of the diagram. Paragraphing is used adequately to separate the introduction and overview from the body details. Cohesive devices such as 'In the next step', 'This sugarcane juice is transfered', and 'Finally' are utilized to guide the reader through the process, though referencing is occasionally slightly repetitive or mechanical (e.g., frequent use of 'the juice' and 'these sugar canes'). Overall, the information flows coherently from start to finish.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for a process description, employing terms such as 'agricultural production', 'transported', 'crushing', 'purifying', 'evaporation', and 'centrifugation'. However, there are noticeable word-choice and spelling errors that prevent a higher band, such as 'transfered' (transferred), 'machinary' (machinery), and awkward phrasing like 'takes almost 1-1.5 years of time' and 'sugar canes cutting by the farmers'. While less common vocabulary is attempted, these persistent minor slips mean the lexical control aligns best with a Band 6.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses ('which takes almost 1-1.5 years') and participle clauses. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with voice and verb forms, such as 'sugar canes cutting by the farmers and collected' (passive voice breakdown) and 'to form a sugar, which become complete solid product' (subject-verb agreement). Punctuation and article use also show recurrent inaccuracies. While communication is not severely impeded, these errors prevent the response from achieving a higher band.

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