Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given diagram demonstrates how the suger is produced from the suagr cane which are in total 7 stages.

In the first stage, as we can see sugar canes take to approximately 12-18 months to grow. After that, these sugar canes are harvested by a machine and a farmer. Machine is helped to harvet sugar canes fast and in bulk quantity. In the next stage, those sugar canes are crushed by a machine and converted into juice. Once they have been converted into juice, then the juice is purified by limestone filter.

In the fifth stage, filtered juice is poured into evaporator and started to heat which is later converted into syrup. Then with the help of centrifuge, sugar crystals are saperted from syrup. In the final stage, those saperated sugar are proceed futher to drying and colling process.

To sum up, it would be quite interesting to note that the process of making sugar from sugarcanes consist of total 7 stages from growing sugar canes to converted into sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student successfully covers all seven stages of the sugar manufacturing process, starting from the 12-18 month growing period up to the final drying and cooling stage. A clear overview is provided at the beginning and reinforced in the concluding sentence. However, the response includes unnecessary elaboration and personal interpretation outside the diagram, such as explaining that the machine helps harvest 'fast and in bulk quantity' and describing the process as 'quite interesting'. Furthermore, there is a minor spelling error in the overview ('suger' and 'suagr'). Despite these minor flaws, the main features and sequence of the diagram are reported accurately, fulfilling the requirements for Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into four logical paragraphs that correspond to the introduction, the first half of the process, the second half of the process, and a summary. Cohesive devices such as 'In the first stage', 'After that', 'Once they have been converted into juice', and 'In the final stage' are used effectively to guide the reader through the sequential steps. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different sections of the diagram flow. However, referencing is occasionally imprecise (e.g., 'Once they have been converted into juice' where the antecedent is slightly blurred between canes and juice). Overall progression is clear, supporting a Band 6.5 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing a mechanical and agricultural process, using terms such as 'harvested', 'crushed', 'purified', 'evaporator', 'centrifuge', and 'crystals'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('suger', 'suagr', 'saperted', 'saperated', 'colling', 'futher', 'consist') and some awkward word choices or forms, such as 'sugar canes take to approximately' and 'sugar are proceed'. While less common vocabulary is attempted, the persistence of basic spelling mistakes and imprecise word formation keeps the lexical score at a Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including passive voice constructions (e.g., 'these sugar canes are harvested', 'filtered juice is poured', 'sugar crystals are saperted'). There are, however, several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'sugar canes take to approximately' (unnecessary preposition), 'Machine is helped to harvet' (incorrect passive/active voice blend), and 'sugar are proceed' (subject-verb agreement and voice error). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but grammatical inaccuracies occur frequently enough to occasionally impede natural reading flow, aligning the response with Band 5.5.

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