Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The picture illustrates the manufacturing process for preparing sugar from glucose cane.

According to the diagram, there are total seven steps for making sugar. From starting, sugar canes were growing in two years. After that, through the cutting machine and men were using the tool for harvesting the many sugar canes. In the third step was crushing the sugar bcanes after crushing, juice was produce.

Purifying juice through the limestone filter and the next was evaporator . In the evaporation method juice become syrup through the heating process. Same in this process heating chamber is used for evaporator the juice after evaporation the water remained the juice in the form of syrup. And in the second last step was centrifuge. The process of centrifuge in which the sugar crystals were seperating from syrup. This process shows the pure form out of glucose particles from syrup. In the closing step was drying and cooling, and after this now sugar has prepared

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all main stages of the sugar manufacturing process, from growing and harvesting through to drying and cooling. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the visual data. For instance, the student states that sugar canes 'were growing in two years,' whereas the diagram clearly indicates a period of 12 to 18 months. Additionally, there are awkward phrasings and factual misinterpretations regarding the steps, such as referring to 'glucose cane' instead of sugar cane and 'glucose particles.' While an overview of the seven steps is attempted, the lack of precision in describing key mechanical and chemical processes prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks proper paragraphing, being presented as a single block of text or disjointed mini-paragraphs, which hampers the logical flow. Although chronological markers like 'From starting,' 'After that,' and 'In the third step' are used, they are often unnatural or mechanically applied. Referencing and progression are frequently unclear, as seen in sentences like 'Same in this process heating chamber is used for evaporator the juice after evaporation the water remained the juice,' making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of transformations.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, with basic terms like 'process,' 'step,' 'juice,' and 'syrup' appearing frequently. There are noticeable lexical errors and inappropriate word forms, such as 'glucose cane' instead of sugar cane, 'bcanes' (typographical error for canes), 'produce' instead of produced, 'evaporator' used as a verb incorrectly, and 'seperating.' These inaccuracies and awkward word choices restrict the range of vocabulary and occasionally impede clear communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or awkwardly constructed sentences. There are frequent, intrusive errors in basic grammar, tense usage, and sentence structure, such as 'there are total seven steps,' 'men were using the tool for harvesting,' and 'now sugar has prepared.' Passive and active voice are mixed up awkwardly, and missing auxiliary verbs or incorrect verb forms are common throughout the text, causing constant difficulty for the reader.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.