Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The process diagram illustrates that the production of sugar making process from sugar cane.

Overall, it is clrar that, this process composed of 7 steps, from growing sugar cane to last product sugar by drying and cooling.

Growing sugar cane almot takes 12 to 18 months in agriculture field, and then starts the process hervesting of sugar cane by large machine and also by formers. In third step, crushing of sugar cane starts that converts the cane into juice, and collectes in drums. Purifying juice by limestone filter is initiate , and after this heating is starts in evaporator, in this juice of sugar cane becomes syrup like products. In six step, centrifuge process is start that separates sugar crystals from syrup in this machine.At the end of the making sugar process, last product is going to drying and cooling process, and then sugar collected in the drum after complete drying first and then cool down.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all stages of the sugar manufacturing process, identifying the seven main steps from growing to cooling and drying. However, there are significant issues with the execution. The opening sentence contains a major grammatical error and phrasing confusion ('the production of sugar making process from sugar cane'). While the main stages—growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying—are mentioned in sequence, the details are presented in a very simplistic and list-like manner. The overview is weak, merely stating that the process has 7 steps rather than effectively summarizing the overarching nature of the process (e.g., that it is a linear industrial sequence transitioning from agricultural cultivation to mechanical and chemical refinement). Therefore, Task Achievement is constrained to Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text suffers from poor paragraphing, as the entire response is clumped into a single block of text rather than being logically structured into an introduction/overview and body paragraphs. Although sequential markers like 'In third step' and 'At the end of the making sugar process' are attempted, cohesive devices are frequently awkward, inaccurate, or repetitive. Progression is difficult to follow smoothly because sentences run into one another with weak logical links. Referencing is also faulty in places, such as 'collectes in drums' and 'heating is starts in evaporator, in this juice of sugar cane becomes syrup'. These cohesive failures place the response firmly in the Band 5 category.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-form errors that detract from the reading experience. Examples include 'clrar' instead of clear, 'almot' instead of almost, 'hervesting' instead of harvesting, 'formers' instead of farmers, and 'collectes' instead of collected. While some task-specific terms are present (e.g., 'limestone filter', 'evaporator', 'centrifuge', 'sugar crystals'), the attempts to use less common vocabulary or varied phrasing result in noticeable lexical errors ('syrup like products'). The range is minimally adequate to convey the basic steps, fitting the Band 5 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical structures employed are limited and frequently inaccurate. The text contains many foundational errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('heating is starts', 'process is start'), incorrect preposition use, and fragment sentences ('Purifying juice by limestone filter is initiate , and after this heating is starts in evaporator'). Complex sentence attempts almost invariably contain errors, and simple sentences often display awkward phrasing or missing articles (e.g., 'last product sugar'). Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.

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