Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrate the manufacturing process step by step for producing sugar from sugar cane.

overall, the process are well defined sequence argiculture and industrial steps,from growth of sugar cane and produce to refined sugar.after seven manufacturing steps the sugar are ready.

The process commences with growthing stage, where sugar canes cultivated 12-18 months.once mature the canes enter the harvesting car which can be carried out mechanically,cut down and load the canes or manually by workers.

Next harvested sugar canes enter the crushing machine .this step completed the juice from sugar canes. Then juice proceeds the purification stage ,passing the limestone filter to remove impurities.

After purification, juice send into evaporator. Here the juice create syrup by heating. Then syrup goes to centrifuge to separates sugar crystal from syrup.

Finally, the sugar crystal separates from sugar then send into container for dried and cooled after finished the stage the sugar ready to distribution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student successfully identifies the main features of the sugar cane manufacturing process, covering all seven stages from growing and harvesting through to drying and cooling. An overview is attempted at the beginning, noting that the process comprises agricultural and industrial steps leading to refined sugar. While the overall progression is captured accurately, the response lacks detailed comparisons between the mechanical and manual harvesting methods, and some steps are described rather simply without fully expanding on the visual data. Nevertheless, all parts of the prompt are addressed adequately, fitting the criteria for Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into distinct paragraphs, attempting a logical progression from the beginning to the end of the manufacturing process. However, the cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. For instance, transitional phrases like 'Next harvested sugar canes enter' and 'Then juice proceeds' lack correct prepositions and articles. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within sentences is hindered by abrupt transitions and missing grammatical links. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors disrupt the flow, placing this text firmly in Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for describing a process, incorporating terms such as 'manufacturing process', 'impurities', 'evaporator', and 'centrifuge'. However, there are numerous word choice and form errors, such as 'growthing stage', 'argiculture', 'harvesting car', and 'separates sugar crystal from syrup'. Less common lexical items are attempted but frequently misused or misspelled. While meaning is generally conveyed, the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies prevents the score from reaching Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms ('the process are well defined', 'sugar canes cultivated 12-18 months', 'juice send into evaporator'), missing articles ('enter harvesting car', 'passing limestone filter'), and awkward passive/active constructions. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with missing periods and commas. Because errors are persistent and frequently impede smooth reading, the writing aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.

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