Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The process to how sugar is produced from sugar cane
overall,the step by step learning how sugar produced from sugar cane there are seven steps
To begin with, Growing the sugar cane takes 12 to 18 months to grow after growing sugarcane harvesting is the next step and then crushing the sugar canes into machine to make juice before the next step purifying juice is impotant limestone filter
moving to the fuerther details, afterwards the evaporation step begins where heat the juice centrifuge in which the separate sugar crystal from syrup then put the sugar into big steel container for drying and cooling .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to summarise the seven-stage sugar production process from sugar cane, noting the main steps such as growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying/cooling. However, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 104 words. Consequently, the coverage of the process is somewhat abbreviated and lacks full development. While the main features are touched upon, the significant under-length constraint restricts the band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into an introduction and one body paragraph, but the paragraphing is underdeveloped. Cohesive devices and transition markers are attempted (e.g., 'To begin with', 'moving to the fuerther details'), but punctuation and capitalization errors ('overall,the', 'fuerther') disrupt the flow. Progression is somewhat disjointed due to run-on phrasing and missing punctuation between distinct stages.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors ('impotant', 'fuerther', 'crystal' instead of crystals). There are attempts to use process-related terms like 'crushing', 'limestone filter', 'evaporation', and 'centrifuge', but overall lexical control is limited, and word choice and collocation are frequently imprecise ('into machine to make juice', 'where heat the juice').
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response relies heavily on simple and faulty complex structures. There are major grammatical and punctuation errors throughout, such as missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and run-on sentences (e.g., 'The process to how sugar is produced from sugar cane', 'after growing sugarcane harvesting is the next step and then crushing the sugar canes into machine to make juice before the next step purifying juice is impotant limestone filter'). Frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader.
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