Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The diagram illustrates to prepare the suger and convert into suger cane and also how makes juice and serups.

Overall, the suger cane growing with in one and half year and than harvesting it and crushing into the wheel machine to make a juice. After wards, it juice is cooking on the heat to become a syrup, and after that the centrifuge process to separates the suger from syrup and at the end it becames to converted in suger.

The suger is produced from sugar cane, Firstly the sugar cane were grow and it growing with in 12 to 18 months and after that its harvested from machine or hands and ater while it is crushing into the wheeler and sugar can converted into juices and than purifyin

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 128 words. Furthermore, the description of the process is incomplete, trailing off at the end ("and than purifyin"). While the writer attempts to outline the stages from growing to producing sugar, key details from the diagram are missing or distorted (such as confusing the conversion direction in the opening sentence). The overview is extremely brief and lacks adequate development of the main features shown in the diagram. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The text lacks proper paragraphing and structural control. It consists of a chaotic introduction, an overly compressed body section, and an unfinished concluding sentence that cuts off mid-word. Although some basic cohesive devices are attempted (such as "Overall", "After wards", "and after that"), their usage is clumsy and mechanical. There is no clear logical progression or well-structured overview, and the overall arrangement of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequential stages of the manufacturing process smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary is highly limited, repetitive, and plagued by severe spelling and word-choice errors throughout. Examples include "suger" instead of sugar, "serups" instead of syrups, and "wheeler" instead of crushing machine. The writer struggles with basic lexical items and collocations required for a process diagram. While there are a few correct terms like "harvesting", "crushing", and "centrifuge", the high frequency of non-standard forms and misspellings severely restricts communication and keeps the score at a low band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak. The response contains numerous serious errors in basic sentence structure, tense, and morphology, such as "The diagram illustrates to prepare the suger", "the suger cane growing with in", and "it becames to converted in suger". Simple sentences are frequently malformed, and attempts at more complex structures fail completely due to severe structural breakdowns. Punctuation is haphazard, and the text ends abruptly with an incomplete clause. These frequent, pervasive errors severely impede understanding.

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