Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram shows the detailed process of sugar. That how it is produced from raw material sugar cane. This diagram covers all the process in detail.

Moreover, the diagram shows how the ripe sugar cane is havest and through .Different techniques and then crushed to take out and collect all its pulp.

First of all, sugar can plants are planted in the field. They approximately take 12-18 months to become ripe. Then after they are growned they are harvested, either by hand or by using machines. These harvested sugar canes are crushed to seprate their juice from their waste or shells.

Moreover, this seprated juice is filtered for the first time with lime stone filter. Then it is heated in a chamber to make it dense in the from of syrup then it is centrifuge to seprates its crystal. and at the end it is dryed in a drying chamber to make sugar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to describe the linear manufacturing process of producing sugar from sugar cane, covering the main stages from growing and harvesting through crushing, purifying, heating, centrifuging, and drying. However, the response contains fragmented sentences and repetitive phrasing, such as 'The diagram shows the detailed process of sugar. That how it is produced...'. The overview lacks a clear, cohesive summary of the overall process steps, and several sentences are incomplete or structurally disjointed. While the key stages are identified, the lack of smooth integration and development limits the task achievement to a Band 5.0 level, as the information is presented in a somewhat disjointed manner.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response attempts to use sequencing markers such as 'First of all' and 'Moreover', but paragraphing is erratic and some transitions are awkward or mechanically applied. For instance, the second paragraph consists of a single fragmented sentence. The progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by abrupt shifts and incomplete sentences, making the overall flow choppy and difficult to follow in places. While basic chronological order is attempted, the lack of robust cohesive devices and poor paragraph structure places this performance in Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with several noticeable spelling and word choice errors. Examples include 'havest' instead of 'harvest', 'growned' instead of 'grown', 'seprate' instead of 'separate', 'lime stone' instead of 'limestone', and 'dryed' instead of 'dried'. The student attempts some less common terms related to the process, such as 'centrifuge' and 'pulp', but the frequent lexical and spelling errors impede clear communication and restrict the score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive achievement of basic descriptive vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is weak, characterized by frequent sentence boundary errors, fragments, and non-standard syntax. For example, 'That how it is produced from raw material sugar cane' is a fragment rather than a complete clause. There are also numerous verb form errors, such as 'are growned' and 'it is centrifuge to seprates its crystal'. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex structures frequently fail grammatically. Because errors are very frequent and frequently cause strain for the reader, this warrants a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

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