Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This provided diagram illustrates the processing thst how from sugar canes sugar can be produce. It has seven steps.
Overall, the process begins from crop growth and end up on drying and cooling. There are two ways of harvesting with machine and mannually.
In initial step crop grow within one and half years, in next step crop is ready to harvest then farmers cut by own hands or cut it with machines. Crushing is the next process and then sugar canes crush with machine absract juice and nextly juice pour into limestone filter and purify juice.
Moving further, juice gone through evaporation in which by heat juice become in thick consistency and turn into syrup. In further step syrup converted into sugar crystals process known as centrifuge. Lastly, after crystals become dry and cool the sugar is ready.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe all seven stages of the sugar manufacturing process, starting from crop growth and ending with drying and cooling. A basic overview is provided, noting the number of steps and the two harvesting methods (mechanical and manual). However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 138 words. Furthermore, several descriptions are overly simplistic and contain inaccuracies or unnatural phrasing, such as stating that the crop grows 'within one and half years' or describing the juice extraction process confusingly. Because the word count requirement is not met and the explanation of stages lacks full development and precision, this performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some logical organisation, following the chronological sequence of the diagram from growing to the final product. Transition phrases such as 'Overall', 'In initial step', 'Moving further', and 'Lastly' are attempted to guide the reader through the process. However, paragraphing is extremely poor, with the entire text lumped into just two short blocks instead of breaking down the stages logically. Cohesive devices are often repetitive, mechanical, or awkwardly used (e.g., 'and nextly juice pour into'), and referencing is sometimes unclear. While an overall progression is discernible, the structural flaws place this response firmly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, struggling with accurate word forms and collocations. Examples of lexical errors and awkward phrasing include 'processing thst how from sugar canes sugar can be produce', 'mannually', 'crop grow', and 'juice gone through evaporation'. The student attempts some less common terms related to the process, such as 'evaporation', 'centrifuge', and 'limestone filter', but these are often embedded in grammatically flawed structures or incorrect word forms (e.g., 'juice become in thick consistency'). Due to the limited range and noticeable errors that occasionally impede understanding, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed compound/complex attempts that contain frequent errors. Examples include tense confusion ('crop grow' instead of 'crops grow'), missing prepositions and articles ('end up on drying', 'cut by own hands'), and severe fragment issues or run-on structures (e.g., 'Crushing is the next process and then sugar canes crush with machine absract juice and nextly juice pour into limestone filter and purify juice'). These persistent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence construction cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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