Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrate the manufacturing process of making sugar from the sugar cane, tracing the process from growing to the final process of making sugar.
overall, the procedure follow a linear mutli-stage sequence that begin with growing sugar cane , and ends with drying and cooling the process of sugar, during these stages the sugar canes are harvesting, crushing and in last convert into sugar.
In the initial stages, the sugar canes are crops and harvest by using the machine, before the process of crushed sugar canes has been clean up, when the juice made, purify these juice by using the limestone filter and seprated this from filter.
by moving the other process, use heating method to exporate this nad juice become syrup form, after this process sugar has been separated from crystals, finally the last stage is drying the sugar and also cooled this process to make the final sugar.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to summarise the main stages of the sugar manufacturing process, starting from growing and harvesting through to drying and cooling. However, there are significant omissions and misreadings of the diagram. For instance, the text mentions that the juice is 'seprated this from filter' and refers to 'exporate this nad juice become syrup form', which distorts the actual sequence and operations depicted (such as the evaporator and centrifuge). Furthermore, the overview provided in the second sentence contains several inaccuracies and is difficult to follow. Because the response covers the general trajectory of the process but fails to report several key features and relationships accurately, it aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay lacks clear logical progression and paragraphing structure. The entire response is essentially grouped into a couple of dense blocks rather than a well-structured introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'overall, the procedure follow a linear mutli-stage sequence that begin with' (subject-verb agreement issues) and 'by moving the other process', which creates mechanical and confusing transitions between ideas. The overall arrangement makes it challenging for the reader to follow the exact sequence of steps smoothly. This performance corresponds to Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and limited, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of lexical and spelling inaccuracies include 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'mutli-stage' instead of 'multi-stage', 'crops and harvest' instead of 'cultivated and harvested', 'crushed' instead of 'crushing', 'exporate' instead of 'evaporate', and 'nad' instead of 'and'. While the student attempts some topic-specific terms like 'harvesting', 'crushing', 'limestone filter', and 'syrup', the high frequency of lexical and mechanical errors keeps the score at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive marking for attempt at task-related terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement errors ('The diagram illustrate', 'the procedure follow'), tense inconsistencies, and incorrect word forms ('convert into sugar' instead of 'converted into sugar'). Punctuation is also poorly managed, resulting in long, run-on sentences with comma splices. These errors frequently impede communication and require the reader to re-read sections to grasp the meaning. Therefore, this fits the Band 4 descriptors.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.