Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates how sugar is produced from sugarcane.

Overall, the process consists of seven main stages, beginning with the collection of sugar canes and ending with the production of sugar.

At the first stage, sugar canes take 12-18 months to grow. Then in the second stage, these sugar canes are harvested in two ways through tractors and stored in container. Although, it can be cut by workers manually. In the following step, these canes underwent the process of crushing and the formation of juice. Subsequently, the juice is passed to limestone filter to remove impurities. In the fifth step, the juice is stored in a vessel and then heated at higher temperature and evaporates the water to make it more thicker and to turn into syrup.

The most important part of this process is to centrifuge the sugar crystals from the syrup. The process ends with last stage, which is to dry and cool the sugar in a metal vessel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student successfully covers all main stages of the sugar manufacturing process, from growing and harvesting to drying and cooling. An overview is provided in the second paragraph, stating that the process consists of seven main stages. Key features such as the dual harvesting methods (tractors and manual cutting), crushing, filtering, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying are accurately reported. The information is fully grounded in the provided diagram without major omissions or factual errors, satisfying the requirements for Task Achievement at a Band 7.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is organized logically with a clear introduction, body paragraphs detailing the stages sequentially, and a concluding step. Cohesive devices such as 'At the first stage', 'Then in the second stage', 'In the following step', and 'Subsequently' are used to guide the reader through the process. However, paragraphing could be structured more evenly, as the second paragraph is quite dense and long. Referencing is generally clear, though minor cohesive slips occur, placing the response solidly in the Band 6.5 to 7.0 range.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing a process, incorporating terms like 'impurities', 'evaporates', 'centrifuge', and 'crystals'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with varying success ('more thicker' is a comparative error). Word choice is generally appropriate and communication is never impeded. Spelling is accurate throughout. This performance aligns well with the Band 6.0 descriptors, showing sufficient flexibility for the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is used, including subordinate clauses and passive voice constructions ('the juice is passed', 'are harvested'). However, there are notable grammatical inconsistencies and tense shifts, such as 'these canes underwent' following present tense verbs, and the redundant phrasing 'more thicker'. Punctuation is generally fine, but sentence structures contain occasional errors that prevent the grammar score from reaching Band 7.0.

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