Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagrame illustrates santesizing procedure of sugar from sugar cane.
Overall, seven major steps are undertaken to finalise the resultant product like eatable sugar from raw sugar canes.
Firstly the sugar canes farms required 12-18 months for proper cultivation. when they are fully ripped and ready for next process like harvesting. During this stage the farmers or even the machines are used to harvest the fileds of canes.The big tractors wrip the field and collect it in the loder attach to its back. After that the huge amount of canes are collectively placed in the turbine like machine with two wheels attach to its both sides, hence the wheels rotate and juice is extracted from the raw suger canes.
The purified juice is then pored in the filter which is known as the limestone filter. From which the juice is processed and purifed. In the next stage juice is placed large tanke fire underneeth it in the evaporator and the juice becomes syrup here followed by centrifuge and finnaly ready for drying and cooling
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all the key stages of the sugar manufacturing process, from growing and harvesting through to crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and finally drying and cooling. An overview is provided in the second sentence, noting that seven major steps are undertaken. However, some details are slightly inaccurate or over-elaborated based on the diagram—for instance, mentioning a turbine-like machine with two wheels or big tractors ripping the field, which introduces outside description rather than strictly summarising the visual data. Nevertheless, the main features and chronological sequence of the process are successfully reported, fulfilling the core requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is arranged logically following the sequence of the diagram, moving from growing to the final cooling stage. Cohesive devices and sequence markers are used, such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', 'During this stage', 'After that', 'The purified juice is then', and 'In the next stage'. However, paragraphing is weak; the entire body of the response is crammed into a single block alongside the introduction, rather than being broken into clear logical paragraphs. Furthermore, referencing is occasionally vague or mechanical, and punctuation issues (such as missing full stops between sentences) affect the overall flow and readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to describe the process, attempting less common items related to the diagram such as 'cultivation', 'harvesting', 'crushed', 'purified', 'evaporator', and 'centrifuge'. However, there are numerous spelling errors ('diagrame', 'santesizing', 'ripped' instead of 'ripe', 'loder', 'suger', 'pored', 'purifed', 'tanke', 'underneeth', 'finnaly') and inappropriate word choices ('wrip' instead of 'rip' or 'reap', 'fire' instead of 'heated'). These lexical errors and frequent misspellings occasionally impede communication and restrict the score to the lower intermediate band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses ('filter which is known as the limestone filter') and temporal clauses ('when they are fully ripped'). However, control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('sugar canes farms required'), missing articles ('is placed large tanke'), sentence fragments ('followed by centrifuge and finnaly ready for drying and cooling'), and run-on sentences with missing terminal punctuation. These errors cause frequent difficulty for the reader and demonstrate limited control over complex forms.
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