Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
as in the diagram, show the sugar making process which start from the growing of the sugarcane plant. as we saw in the diagram the sugarcane tooks a time for growing around (12-18 months). After that the Farmers harvesting the field and took the best one sugarcane. Sugarcane senting to the factory to start the process of making sugar, that process start with crusing. while crusing the sugarcane we got the juice of the sugarcane laterly purify the juice through the limestone filter. The sugarcane juice put on the heat for becomes syrup which took bit time or in other terms called evaporator. When this step complete the sugar crystals start seprating from the syrup during sepratration from syrup we just say the process called as centrifuge. and in the final process people left the sugar in one big container for drying and cooling now which having the sugar.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all stages of the sugar manufacturing process, starting from growing and harvesting through to drying and cooling. However, the explanation is brief, informal, and contains minor omissions in detail. Furthermore, the response falls just short of the minimum word count requirement, containing 149 words instead of 150. While the main steps of crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying are mentioned, the lack of an overarching introductory overview and the under-development of certain stages place this criterion at band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is presented as a single continuous block of text rather than being divided into logical paragraphs, which significantly impacts its overall organization. While chronological sequencing words like 'After that', 'while', 'laterly', and 'When this step complete' are used to guide the reader through the linear process, their usage is often awkward or mechanically applied. Referencing is also weak, with phrases like 'which having the sugar' lacking clear grammatical connection. These cohesion and formatting issues warrant a band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is quite limited and heavily reliant on basic vocabulary and direct lifting from the prompt. There are frequent word-choice and word-formation errors, such as 'tookst a time', 'crusing', 'laterly', 'seprating', and 'sepratration'. While the writer manages to communicate the general sequence of the process, these noticeable errors in spelling and collocation cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect band 5.0 characteristics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple sentences linked by basic conjunctions or relative clauses. There are persistent and frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('start', 'took', 'harvesting', 'senting'), missing articles, and awkward syntactic patterns ('the sugarcane put on the heat for becomes syrup'). Complex structures attempted are frequently faulty. These persistent errors place the grammar score at band 5.0.
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