Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The process demonstrates the stages involved in producing sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with growing the sugar canes in the field and ending with drying and cooling of sugar for end users.

Initially, the sugar canes are grew in the farm for 12 to 18 months. After the sugar canes are completely grow in the field, the sugar canes are harvested. After that, the harvested sugar canes are transported forward to crushing process, the juice of sugar canes are collected in a container while crushing. Afterwards, the juice is purified with the help of limestone filter.

In the next stage, the filtered juice is evaporated by heating process, the juice becomes syrup because of the heat. Following this, the syrup is centrifuged, where the sugar crystals are separated from syrup. Lastly, the sugar crystals are gathered in a container then drying and cooling the sugar for the use it in different substances.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student covers all key stages of the sugar manufacturing process from the initial growing phase to the final drying and cooling. An appropriate overview is provided in the second paragraph, outlining the total number of stages and the general progression from cultivation to preparation for the end user. Main features are selected and reported accurately without significant omissions, matching the visual data well. The information is presented in a logical sequence, fulfilling the requirements for Task Achievement at a Band 7.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is organized logically with clear paragraphing, moving from an introduction and overview to body paragraphs detailing the sequential steps. Cohesive devices such as 'Initially', 'After that', 'Afterwards', 'In the next stage', and 'Lastly' are used effectively to guide the reader through the linear process. However, some referencing and linking could be smoother, as certain sentences are joined with comma splices (e.g., '...transported forward to crushing process, the juice of sugar canes are collected...'), which slightly affects the fluidity of the writing. Cohesion is nevertheless clear and appropriate for a Band 6.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for a process description, employing task-specific terms such as 'harvested', 'crushing', 'purified', 'evaporator', and 'centrifuged'. There are some word choice and phrasing inaccuracies, such as 'growing the sugar canes in the field' and 'the use it in different substances' rather than 'products'. However, the vocabulary used is sufficient to communicate the main ideas clearly, placing the response firmly at Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures with varying success. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, particularly regarding passive voice and verb forms, such as 'the sugar canes are grew' instead of 'grown' and 'After the sugar canes are completely grow'. Additionally, there are run-on sentences and comma splices in the third paragraph. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they prevent the score from reaching a higher band. Control of grammar is consistent with a Band 6.0.

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