Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
How sugar is produced from sugar cane
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram below illustrates the manufacturing of sugar from sugarcane.The whole process is carried out in seven major stages.
initially,sugarcane is grown for about 1 year to 1.5 years. after that, harvesting of sugarcane is carried out. in third step sugarcane is crushed and juice is collected. furthermore, filtration process is carried out by using limestone filter. purified juice goes into evaporator and in presence of heat it converts into syrup. moreover, sixth process is carried out to centrifuse that extrated serup and then converted into crystalized sugar form. finally, the crucial part of manufrscure is done which is cooling and dry. following all the process carefully and hygienically pure and final form of crystal sugar is obtained.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student successfully identifies all seven major stages of the sugar manufacturing process from sugarcane, starting from growing and harvesting, through crushing, purifying, evaporating, and centrifuging, to the final drying and cooling. An overview is provided stating that the process is carried out in seven major stages. However, the response falls significantly short of the word count requirement, containing only 118 words compared to the minimum of 150 words. This under-length impacts the level of detail and extension possible, preventing a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text demonstrates a basic overall logical progression that mirrors the steps in the diagram. Some cohesive devices are used to sequence events, such as 'initially', 'after that', 'furthermore', 'moreover', and 'finally'. However, paragraphing is extremely poor, with the entire body of the response crammed into a single block of text rather than being structured effectively. Referencing and linking are occasionally mechanical and lack sophisticated transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts some subject-specific vocabulary relevant to the diagram, such as 'sugarcane', 'limestone filter', 'evaporator', 'syrup', and 'crystalized sugar'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'centrifuse' instead of 'centrifuge', 'extrated serup' instead of 'extracted syrup', 'crystalized' instead of 'crystallized', and 'manufrscure' instead of 'manufacture'. These lexical errors and a limited vocabulary range restrict the score to a band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple structures and attempted complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak. There are several punctuation and capitalization errors, such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences (e.g., 'initially,sugarcane' and 'after that, harvesting') and missing spaces after punctuation marks. In addition, awkward phrasings like 'the crucial part of manufrscure is done which is cooling and dry' demonstrate frequent errors in word form and sentence structure that detract from the overall quality.
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