Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This picture show the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

overall, this picture depicts there are seven steps are involved for the manufacturing of sugar from sugar cane, first planting the sugar cane stalk into the soil to grow a new plant and the seventh is sugar give rest for the purpose of sugar dry and cool.

Firstly, the planting the sugarcane stalk into the soil to grow a new plant. After twelve to eighteen months sugarcane grow from the soil. After the growing process sugarcane is ready for harvest. Harvesting is done by two method firstly with mankind and second with the machines. Furthermore, the sugarcane crushing into the crushing machine it result the juice is release from the sugarcane. In the fourth step juice will purify with the help of limestone filter.

In the fifth step juice put into the container and set on the heat for evaporate, it result juice becomes syrup. Then the rotating machine is used for separating the sugar crystals from the syrup. In the seventh steps sugar is put into the container for the purpose of drying and cooling. then the sugar is used for further step.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover all stages of the sugar manufacturing process from growing to drying and cooling, correctly identifying key features such as the 12-18 month growing period, the two harvesting methods, and the subsequent mechanical and chemical stages. However, the summary lacks a well-developed overall overview; the opening sentence merely states 'This picture show...', and the overview attempts are fragmented. Some steps are described with overly simplistic phrasing rather than precise academic summarisation (e.g., 'sugar give rest for the purpose of sugar dry and cool'). While the main stages are outlined, the lack of a cohesive introduction and concise summary of core trends places this in Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into three paragraphs, providing a basic structural layout that attempts to follow the chronological sequence of the diagram. Cohesive devices are used, but they are frequently repetitive and mechanical, such as 'Firstly', 'After', 'Furthermore', and 'In the fifth step'. Additionally, paragraphing is somewhat erratic; the introduction is mixed with a weak overview, and transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in phrases like 'then the sugar is used for further step.' Progression is discernible, but the overall organization suffers from awkward transitions and rudimentary sequencing, warranting a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary relevant to the diagram, including terms like 'manufacturing process', 'sugar cane', 'harvesting', 'limestone filter', and 'syrup'. However, there are frequent inappropriate word choices and word-formation errors, such as 'sugar give rest', 'mankind' instead of manual labor or humans, and 'it result the juice is release'. Spelling and morphological errors ('evaporate' used instead of evaporation or boiling, 'steps' instead of step) are noticeable and occasionally cause strain for the reader. The lexical range is limited and repetitive, reflecting a Band 5.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing contains a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and awkward noun-phrase fragments ('first planting the sugar cane stalk...', 'the planting the sugarcane stalk'). There are frequent grammatical errors involving subject-verb agreement ('This picture show', 'sugarcane grow'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms ('juice will purify' instead of will be purified, 'juice put into the container'). Complex sentence attempts are generally faulty and lack control. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the meaning of specific steps, the grammar aligns with Band 5.0.

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