Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

first of all the sugar canes takes 12 to 18 months for growth when they are ready farmers cuts them for harvesting after harvesting sugar cane is proceed to machinery for curshing where there juice is extracted and juice is not pruified so for purification the mixture is filtered through limestone filter after purifying the mixture the juice is proceeded to the evaporator to make the syrup from it by heat it.In centrifugal pump the sugar crystal are removed from syrup by the pressure of air and finally in the last step the hot sugar is cooled down and dryed to use it for the daily life.That all the process to produce sugar from the sugar cane

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially and falls significantly short of the word count requirement, containing only 117 words instead of the minimum 150 words. While the candidate attempts to outline the stages of the sugar manufacturing process from growing to cooling, the information presented is overly basic and lacks a clear, overarching overview of the process. Several steps are mentioned sequentially, but the development of ideas is limited, and some details are vague or slightly inaccurate, such as describing the centrifuge as working by the pressure of air. To achieve a higher band, the response must meet the minimum word count, provide a well-developed overview, and report the main features of the diagram more accurately and fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates some organization by following the chronological order of the process from growing to cooling, but there is no clear overall progression due to a lack of proper paragraphing, as the entire text is written as a single block. Cohesive devices are basic, repetitive, and at times inaccurate, relying heavily on simple connectors like 'first of all', 'after harvesting', and 'finally'. Referencing is also weak, with ambiguous pronouns such as 'where there juice is extracted'. To improve in this criterion, the writer needs to divide the text into logical paragraphs, introduce a clear introductory sentence, and use a wider variety of cohesive devices more accurately to link the stages of the process smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, featuring basic and repetitive terms like 'sugar canes', 'juice', 'mixture', and 'sugar'. There are several noticeable lexical errors, including word form and spelling mistakes such as 'proceed' instead of 'passed' or 'sent', 'curshing' instead of 'crushing', 'pruified' instead of 'purified', and 'dryed' instead of 'dried'. These errors and the lack of less common vocabulary restrict the response to a lower band. To reach a higher level, the candidate should incorporate more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'extraction', 'filtration', 'crystallisation', and ensure accurate spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple or poorly connected clauses run together without proper punctuation. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('the sugar canes takes 12 to 18 months for growth'), subject-verb agreement issues ('farmers cuts them'), incorrect prepositional usage ('for harvesting'), and awkward passive voice formations ('juice is not pruified'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with run-on sentences and missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences. To improve, the student must work on sentence boundaries, punctuation, article usage, and accurately form complex grammatical structures such as the passive voice.

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