Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the mannnnufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. there are seven stage in total ,starting with the cultivation of the cane and ending with the production of sgur crystal s.

overall, it is the linear process that is mainly agriculture in the first two stages and andustrial there after.

in the first stage sugar cane is grow for 12 to 18 month.in the second stage the mature cane harvested either by hand or by machine

thirdly the harvested cane is cruhed to extract its juice . this juice is than purified in the forth stagge . where it is heated and lime in added to remove impurities

in the fift stage the pur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 114 words. Because the text breaks off unfinished in the fifth stage, the process is only partially described, leaving out the final steps of centrifugation, drying, and cooling. Consequently, the task is only addressed in a minimal and incomplete way. While there is a brief attempt at an overview identifying the linear nature of the process, the lack of completion prevents a full reporting of the main features and stages depicted in the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organization present, with an introductory sentence and some sequencing devices used to guide the reader through the initial steps, such as 'firstly', 'thirdly', and 'in the forth stagge'. However, because the text cuts off prematurely, there is no clear overall progression to a conclusion. Paragraphing is also poorly handled, with the entire response lumped into a single block of text rather than divided logically. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive fashion, reflecting a limited ability to structure a longer report smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for describing a process, featuring basic terms such as 'growing', 'harvested', 'juice', and 'heat'. There are numerous noticeable errors in spelling and word form, including severe typos like 'mannnnufacturing', 'sgur crystal s', 'andustrial', 'grow' instead of 'grown', 'cruhed', 'than' instead of 'then', and 'fift'. These errors and informal punctuation habits are frequent enough to cause some distraction for the reader, and the lack of precise less-common vocabulary prevents the writing from achieving a higher level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mainly of simple sentences with frequent omissions of punctuation, capital letters, and articles. There are noticeable errors in verb forms and passive structures, such as 'sugar cane is grow for 12 to 18 month' (missing plural and past participle forms) and 'mature cane harvested' (missing auxiliary verb for the passive voice). Furthermore, spelling mistakes and the complete lack of proper sentence boundaries and capitalization throughout the text detract significantly from grammatical and punctuation control.

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