Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The process chart illustrates the manufacturing of sugar from sugar cane. The whole process involes seven major steps.

Overall, the process of making sugar is simple. It includes simple steps, the harvested sugar cane gets into a machine to extract the juice of it which is boiled to high temperature after purifying. After that sugar crystal is separated from syrup it leads to final product.

The most important part of manufacturing is growing a sugar cane which takes around 12 to 18 months for the a perfect length. Furthermore, after achieving the ideal length it is harvested by either manual or by harvesting machinery. Then it gets into process of extracting juice out of sugar cane with the help of crusher, which follows to a funnel to purify the juice using limestone filter.

Moreover, the purified juice is boiled in an evaporator till juice becomes syrup with help of heat. However, the syrup is also one form of a sugar but it gets through a centrifuge which separates sugar crystals from syrup. Finally, the last step before it's ready is cooling down the temperature and it would be ready to use.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from the 12–18-month growing period through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. Your overview also identifies the key transformation from cane to juice and then to sugar crystals, showing a sound grasp of the process. This meets the task well, while some details are less fully or precisely reported: for example, the diagram shows juice passing through a limestone filter, not a funnel, and the final stage is specifically drying and cooling rather than simply cooling the temperature. The claim that the process is “simple” adds little. To strengthen the response further, describe the final stage accurately and keep each process detail closely tied to the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by stages in sequence, with separate paragraphs for the later processing steps. Sequencing words such as “Furthermore,” “Then,” “Moreover,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process. However, some linking is mechanical or not quite logical. “However” does not express a contrast in the centrifuge sentence, and “after achieving the ideal length” is an unclear reference to the cane’s growth. The overview also repeats the idea that the process has simple steps. Use more direct transitions based on the stages, and make references explicit—for example, state that the cane is harvested once it has grown for 12–18 months.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “manufacturing,” “extracting,” “purify,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” which allows you to describe the main stages. Some less common terms are attempted, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural: “funnel” does not match the limestone filter, “ideal length” is not shown in the diagram, and “ready to use” is less suitable than describing the finished sugar. There are also spelling and word-form slips, including “involes” and “sugar crystal.” Aim for precise process collocations and check spelling and number forms. This would make the description more natural and exact without requiring a much wider vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “which takes around 12 to 18 months” and a sequence of linked process clauses. The meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “for the a perfect length” has an article problem, “it gets into process” is missing an article, and “it would be ready to use” shifts awkwardly from the present-tense process description to a conditional form. The overview sentence beginning “After that sugar crystal is separated” also needs clearer sentence structure and plural agreement. Use the present simple consistently for process stages, and check articles, plurals, and clause boundaries when combining steps.

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