Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given diagram illustrates the how to produces sugar from sugar can.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that this process is divided into seven stages. Start with growing of sugar canes and ending with drying and cooling.

To begin with, farmer planting the canes in land and then they spend around 12 to 18 months of process proper growing, afterthat farmer harvesting their crops through machines and hand. Follwing steps, this all cutting sugar canes crusing in machines and they making juice and after they whole juice purifying in limestone filter .

Next step, this all the juice in evaporator and make syrup and this all process in big container and high tempretaure, follow this process, this is all the syrup they devide incentrifuge and they seprate sugar crystal from syrup. Lastly, this all the seprate sugar they drying and cooling in big container and after that they making package and sale .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the process as having seven stages and give a relevant overview from growing sugar cane to drying and cooling. The main sequence is mostly represented, including harvesting by machine or by hand, crushing, purification, evaporation and separation in a centrifuge. However, some stages are described unclearly, such as “this all the juice in evaporator,” and the final claim that the sugar is packaged and sold is not shown in the diagram. The overview could also state more precisely that the process turns cane into sugar crystals. To strengthen the response, describe each stage accurately and avoid adding an unsupported endpoint.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the stages in sequence. Transitions such as “To begin with,” “Next step,” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the process. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and repeated references such as “this all” make it difficult to identify what each sentence refers to. Several stages are also crowded into long sentences, particularly the account of harvesting, crushing and purification. Use clearer sentence boundaries and refer directly to the material or product at each point—for example, “The extracted juice is then purified”—to make the progression smoother and the links between stages more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” “centrifuge,” and “sugar crystal,” which helps convey the technical stages. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, word-form and spelling errors reduce precision: “sugar can” should be “sugar cane,” “crusing” is unclear, and “devide” and “seprate” are misspelled. Phrases such as “big container” and “they making package and sale” are also imprecise or unnatural for a process description. Build a more accurate set of verbs for describing transformations and use specific terms such as “vessel” or “container” only when supported by the diagram.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the sequence is generally understandable. However, some errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles and agreement make several descriptions difficult to follow. For example, “The given diagram illustrates the how to produces” combines incompatible structures, while “farmer planting the canes” lacks a finite verb and “they spend around 12 to 18 months of process” is not grammatically complete. The overview fragment “Start with growing … and ending with…” also needs a complete clause. Practise forming clear passive process sentences, such as “The cane is crushed to extract the juice,” and check that each sentence has a subject and correctly formed verb.

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