Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The diagram illustrates the complete process of making sugar from raw sugarcane.

Overall, the making of sugar from sugarcane involves numorous steps which includes time for cultivation followed by harvesting, grinding, filtering, evaporation and drying to get the end product.

To get the finely made sugar from the market farmers cultivate the crop for a period of 12-18 months by carefull watering. Once, the crop is ripe its ready for harvest followed by crushing to extract the juice out of the raw sugarcane. The extracted juice undergoes purification process which is followed by heating to form a thick syrup from the juice. Then the viscous syrup undergoes centrifugation to seprate the sugar crystals from the sugar syrup. The seperated crystals are dried to get the market ready sugar blocks.

This is the complete process which is followed to make sugar from sugarcane in a natural way without any added chemicals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main sequence and give a clear overview, from cultivation through harvesting and processing to the finished sugar. The 12–18-month growing period and the key transformation from juice to syrup and then crystals are accurately reported. This meets the task well, but some details are less fully addressed: the diagram’s two harvesting methods (mechanical and manual) are omitted, and the limestone filter is described only generally as a purification process. The final claim that production is “in a natural way without any added chemicals” is not supported by the diagram; avoid adding information that the visual does not show. For a fuller account, include the harvesting alternatives and describe the drying and cooling stage precisely rather than calling the product “sugar blocks.”

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible order: an introduction, an overview, and a chronological description of the process. Sequencing expressions such as “Once,” “followed by,” and “Then” help the reader follow the stages, and the progression from cultivation to the final product is clear. However, some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “followed by,” and the final sentence repeats the general idea of the process rather than adding useful information. The overview also lists stages in a compressed way, while the body could group the harvesting and processing stages more clearly. Use a wider range of natural transitions and ensure each paragraph has a distinct purpose to make the progression more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a relevant range of process vocabulary, including “cultivation,” “extract,” “purification,” “viscous,” and “centrifugation,” which helps describe the stages with some precision. There are also several inaccurate or unnatural choices that keep the vocabulary from being consistently controlled: “carefull watering” is not shown in the diagram, “market ready sugar blocks” misidentifies the final product, and “natural way without any added chemicals” is an unsupported description. Spelling errors such as “numorous,” “seprate,” and “seperated” are noticeable, although the meaning remains clear. Aim for accurate process terms and collocations, and check spelling carefully; for example, describe the final output simply as dried sugar crystals.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “which is followed by heating” and the sequence of clauses describing juice becoming syrup and crystals being separated. Most of the process remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation choices are present. In “numorous steps which includes,” the plural subject requires “include”; “Once, the crop is ripe its ready” needs more appropriate punctuation and the contraction “it’s”; and “undergoes purification process” needs an article (“a purification process”). The sentence beginning “To get the finely made sugar…” is also awkwardly constructed. Review agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, while retaining the useful variety of structures already attempted.

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