Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given diagram shows the making process of sugar from the sugar cane from starting to the end in several steps.

In the step number one its show that sugar cane get 12 to 18 months to get ready for cutting. After that the farmers get it cutt with machines or by other tools and this process is called harvesting. Step number three is there is machine which use to crush sugar canes and gets its juice out. After that one filter type pipe is use for purify the juice and then juice of the sugar cane put on the heat in the metal tank till juice beomces syrup. Second last step is called Centrifuge in this process the crystals of the sugar separates from syrup. In the end crystals goes to the large size of metal tank for colling and drying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. However, the response is largely a step-by-step account and lacks a clear overview of the process as a whole. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: the diagram shows a limestone filter, not a “filter type pipe,” and the final stage is a cylinder rather than a “large size of metal tank.” The two harvesting methods are only partly described. The response is also 142 words, below the required 150. Add a concise overview, report the diagram’s details precisely, and develop the description enough to meet the minimum.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The stages are generally presented in the correct sequence, and phrases such as “After that,” “Second last step,” and “In the end” help the reader follow the process. This gives the response some organisation. However, it is written as one continuous paragraph, and the repeated step-by-step framing makes progression somewhat mechanical. Several sentences are joined in awkward ways, such as “Step number three is there is machine which use to crush…” and “After that one filter type pipe is use…,” which interrupts the flow. Use a clear introductory overview followed by logically grouped stages, and connect related actions with more natural transitions and clearer sentence boundaries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crush,” “juice,” “syrup,” “crystals,” and “centrifuge,” so the reader can understand the general subject. The range is nevertheless limited, with repeated reliance on “step” and general words such as “process” and “machine.” Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or imprecise: “filter type pipe” does not describe the limestone filter clearly, and “large size of metal tank” is not supported by the diagram. Spelling errors such as “cutt,” “beomces,” and “colling” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise process terms and check spelling and natural combinations of words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response communicates the sequence using mostly simple sentences and a few attempts at longer structures, for example, “After that the farmers get it cutt with machines or by other tools.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. Examples include “its show,” “sugar cane get,” “machine which use,” and “the crystals … separates,” where subject–verb agreement and verb forms are not controlled. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “there is machine” and “Step number three is there is machine.” Practise accurate passive forms for process descriptions, such as “the cane is crushed,” and vary sentence structures while checking agreement and articles.

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