Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The flow chart illustrates the manufacturing process for producing sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, production of sugar consists of 7 major steps, beginning with the growing of sugar canes and ending with preparation of sugar.

At the first stage, cultivating the crop for 12 to 18 months produces sugar canes. Next, the sugar canes harvesting takes place in two methods either by hand picking or by the cutting machine. Total harvest is collected and made into bundles. Following this, the bundles of suger canes were sent into crushing machine and as a result sugar cane juice is obtained. After that the juice is purified using limestone filter.

In the next stage, the filtered juice is collected in a container colled evaporator and then start heating it slowly the water eveporates and juice is converted into sugar syrup. Subsequently, by using centrifuge force the sugar crystals are formed abnd sperated from the sugar syrup before drying the crystals are done and later the dried substance is cooled. Finally, sugar can be collected in a bowl.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the process from cultivation through to the final sugar, and the overview correctly identifies seven stages and the start and end points. It also includes key details such as the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, limestone purification, evaporation and centrifuging. This gives a relevant and mostly accurate account. Some details, however, are not shown in the diagram: the crop is said to be collected in bundles, and the final sugar is said to be collected in a bowl. The centrifuge stage is also described as forming crystals, whereas the diagram indicates that it separates crystals from syrup. More precise reporting of these stages, without adding unsupported details, would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information is arranged in a clear sequence, with an overview followed by stages in the order they occur. Linking expressions such as “At the first stage,” “Following this,” “In the next stage,” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process. The paragraphing is also appropriate. However, the transitions can feel somewhat mechanical, and some links between actions are not expressed smoothly—for example, “and then start heating it slowly” interrupts the otherwise clear progression. The final sentence also adds a detail that is not in the diagram, weakening the precision of the ending. Use a wider range of natural sequencing and cause-and-effect links, and make sure each sentence connects clearly to the next stage.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant process vocabulary, including “cultivating,” “purified,” “evaporator,” “centrifuge,” and “crystals,” which helps communicate the main stages. There is some attempt at more specific terminology, but word choice and spelling are uneven. Examples include “suger,” “colled,” “eveporates,” “abnd,” and “sperated”; these errors are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the description. Some phrases are also awkward or imprecise, such as “the sugar canes harvesting” and “by using centrifuge force.” Aim for standard process collocations and check spelling carefully. More accurate terms such as “the cane is harvested,” “the juice is heated,” and “the centrifuge separates” would make the account clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall sequence remains understandable. The opening and overview are controlled, and clauses introduced by “before” and “after” show an attempt to vary sentence structure. However, some grammatical errors make parts less fluent: “the sugar canes harvesting takes place” has an incorrect structure, while “the filtered juice is collected … and then start heating it” shifts from a passive subject to an unexpressed actor. The sentence beginning “Subsequently” also has an unclear construction around the centrifuge and drying stages. Use consistent subjects and verb forms, for example, “The filtered juice is heated in an evaporator” and “The centrifuge separates the crystals from the syrup.” Proofreading sentence boundaries and agreement would improve control.

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