Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided diagram illustrates the process of making sugar using sugar cane.

Overll, the linear process consisit of seven main stages starting with cultivation of sugar cane and ending with fully prepared sugar. The main feature is that mostly of making sugar was done by machinery.

Initially, growing of sugar cane with 12 to 18 months period, then it was time to harvesting it was done by machinery and human by hand. Subsequently sugar cane was put into the crushing machine to extract its juice, this juice goes to purifying on by one drop it pass through the limestone filter.

Following this, the juice moved to boiling temperature, then there is no moisture in the juice it becomes syrup. It moves toward the separation process, where centrigfuge separates sugar crystals from syrup from encircled. In the end of the process, drying and cooling sugar can be visible in metal drum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the full sequence and gives a clear overview: it identifies seven stages, the 12–18-month growing period, and the movement from cultivation to finished sugar. It also includes both harvesting methods and the key processing stages, so the main features are relevant and generally accurate. The overview’s claim that most production is done by machinery is supported by the diagram, although it could be expressed more precisely. Some details are less fully or clearly reported: for example, the limestone filter is described as juice passing through it “one drop” at a time, and the final product is said to be in a “metal drum,” which is not specified. More precise descriptions of the evaporation and centrifuge stages would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement, with an introduction, an overview, and a chronological account of the stages. Sequencing expressions such as “Initially,” “Subsequently,” “Following this,” and “In the end” help the reader follow the process. The progression is mostly clear, but some links between stages are awkward or unclear, particularly “this juice goes to purifying on by one drop it pass through the limestone filter” and “It moves toward the separation process.” These make the relationships between the juice, syrup, and separated crystals harder to follow. Use clearer sentence boundaries and refer consistently to each material as it changes form; this would make the cohesion less mechanical and the progression more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses relevant process vocabulary, including “cultivation,” “crushing machine,” “limestone filter,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” and this gives it an adequate foundation for describing the diagram. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “fully prepared sugar,” “boiling temperature,” “no moisture,” and “from encircled.” There are also spelling errors, including “Overll,” “consisit,” and “centrigfuge,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for precise process terms and natural combinations—for example, say that the juice is heated until it thickens into syrup, then spun in a centrifuge to separate crystals. This would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall sequence can usually be understood. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and several sentences contain faulty structures that sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “Initially, growing of sugar cane with 12 to 18 months period, then it was time to harvesting it” is a fragment with an unclear verb pattern. In “this juice goes to purifying … it pass,” the clause connection and subject–verb agreement are problematic; “the juice moved” also shifts tense from the present used elsewhere. Practise complete sentences with consistent present simple verbs for process descriptions, accurate articles and prepositions, and punctuation that separates each stage clearly.

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