Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The process diagram displays the production process of sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it can be seen that there are 7 steps in this process, which start with growing sugar can in a field and end with drying and cooling the sugar.

At first, the sugar canes are grown in a field for 12 to 18 months. In the next step the sugar canes are harvested by both hands and machine. Then it is transfared into another machine which separate the juice from the sugar canes.

The fourth step shows that the juice from sugar can tranfer from the machine to a limestone filter which purify the juice.The next step is evaporation. In this step the juice becomes syrup in a evaporator. Then the sugar crystals are separated from the syrup. This process is called centrifuge. In the last step sugar are transfred into a large can for cooling and drying.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages and give a clear overview: the process has seven steps, begins with growing cane, and ends with drying and cooling. The duration of 12 to 18 months and both harvesting methods are also accurately reported. This makes the response relevant and gives the reader a sound outline of the process. Some stages, however, are less fully described: for example, the crushing stage is described as separating juice from cane, but the juice flowing out of the crusher could be stated more clearly. The final stage is also slightly misrepresented as sugar being transferred into a “large can”; the diagram shows a cylinder for drying and cooling, not a can. More precise coverage of these details would strengthen the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a sensible order, moving from an overview into the stages from cultivation to the final product. Sequencing phrases such as “At first,” “In the next step,” and “In the last step” help the reader follow the process. The paragraphing also separates the overview from the detailed account. However, the sequence markers become somewhat mechanical, and some links between stages are not expressed smoothly. For instance, “Then it is transferred into another machine” leaves the referent of “it” unclear, while the transition from evaporation to centrifuging could more explicitly show that the syrup is processed there. Use clearer references and vary linking language to make the progression more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the stages. There is some useful variation in describing the process, but word choice and spelling are not consistently controlled. Forms such as “sugar can” and “transfared” are inaccurate, and “large can” is an imprecise choice for the cylinder shown. “By both hands and machine” is also an awkward collocation. These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding the general process, but they reduce precision. Aim for accurate technical terms and natural combinations, such as “by hand or mechanically” and “the cane is crushed to extract its juice.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple sentences and more developed structures, including the overview clause “which start with…” and the explanation “In this step the juice becomes syrup.” The sequence is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “the sugar canes are grown” followed by “which separate the juice,” and “sugar are transferred” should use a singular or uncountable subject with a matching verb. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention: “in a evaporator” requires “an,” and there is no space after the full stop in “juice.The next step.” Passive constructions are appropriate for a process description, so practise using them consistently and check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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