Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given diagram illustrates how the sugar is manufactured from the sugar cane.

Overall, the diagram shows 7 steps to produce the sugar from suagr cane. The process start from farming of sugar cane, passing through industrial procedure ,and final product.

First of all ,the farming time of the sugar cane feild is 12-18 months.When the crop becomes ripe then in the next step diagram shows that it is harvested by farmer or harvester.

After this the industrial process started.Then the chart demonstrates the crushing process of sugar cane to produce juice.In the next phase the juice is is purified by passing it from limestone filter.Now the purified juice is heated in aevaporater and it becomes saturated liquid type syrup.After this move the chart explains that the syrup passes through aprocess known as centrifuge in which the sugar crystal is sperated from sugar syrup. Now the sugar crystal is dryed and cooled and the final product is formed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from the 12–18-month growing period through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview identifies a seven-step process and its progression from cane to final sugar, while details such as the limestone filter and the separation of crystals show good selection of relevant features. This meets the task well, though some descriptions are less precise than the diagram: harvesting is by either a mechanical harvester or by hand, rather than simply “by farmer or harvester,” and the evaporator makes syrup; “saturated liquid type” is not shown. To strengthen the response further, describe the two harvesting methods accurately and avoid adding unsupported detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall sequence and is divided into an introduction, an overview, and a process description. Linking phrases such as “First of all,” “After this,” and “In the next phase” help the reader follow the stages. However, the transitions become somewhat mechanical and repetitive, with several sentences beginning with “After this” or “Now.” The long final paragraph also places many stages together, making the progression less easy to scan. Use paragraphing to group the growing and harvesting stages separately from the factory processes, and vary links with references such as “The harvested cane” or “Once purified.” Check that each transition clearly signals the next stage.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which allows you to describe the diagram’s main operations. There is also some useful variation in phrases such as “the next phase” and “final product.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “farming of sugar cane,” “saturated liquid type syrup,” and “the sugar crystal is … formed.” Spelling errors such as “suagr,” “feild,” “sperated,” and “dryed” are noticeable and reduce precision. Aim for standard process collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe cane as being “grown,” and say that crystals are “separated from the remaining syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex forms, including the time clause “When the crop becomes ripe” and the passive construction “the juice is purified.” The sequence is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “The process start” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the industrial process started” shifts tense unnecessarily in a present-tense process description. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “heated in aevaporater,” and the clause beginning “After this move the chart explains” is awkwardly formed. Use the present simple consistently for general process descriptions, and review articles, agreement, and punctuation around introductory phrases. More accurate control of these structures would make the stages easier to read.

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