Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This diagram illustrates the procedure for making sugar from sugar cane with seven steps.

Overall, there are seven main stages which initiate from growing sugar canes to drying and cooling in the last. The process involves both agricultural and industrial stages, including harvesting, crushing, filtering and heating.

To begin with, sugar canes grown for approximately 12-18 months untill it reaches maturity after that, harvesting is done either mechanically by using specialised machines, or manually by workers. Furthermore, cane is crushed by using a machine to extract its juice then, extracted juice is purified by passing it through a limestone filter.

In the next stage, purified liquid is continously heated in a evaporator to convert juice into thick cane syrup. Moreover, syrup is transfered into centriguge where sugar crystals separates from syrup. Finally, syrup are dried and cooled before pakaging.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main sequence and give a clear overview, identifying seven stages from growing the cane to drying and cooling. Several details are accurately reported, including the 12–18-month growing period, the two harvesting methods, crushing, limestone filtration and evaporation into syrup. However, the final stage is misrepresented: the diagram shows sugar crystals being dried and cooled, not syrup, and it does not show packaging. The centrifuge’s role in separating crystals from syrup is mentioned, but the account could explain the final product more precisely. The response is also 11 words below the required minimum, limiting the space available to report the process fully. Include a little more accurate detail, especially about the output of the centrifuge and the final stage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a sensible sequence, with an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing the stages. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “In the next stage” and “Finally” help the reader follow the process, and the progression from cultivation to processing is clear. This meets the lower-band expectation of an overall coherent arrangement and shows some of the stronger control associated with the next level. However, several links feel mechanical or are joined awkwardly: “after that” runs into the harvesting clause, while “then” connects two stages without clear punctuation. “Furthermore” and “Moreover” are also used where a simple sequence marker would be more precise. Use full stops or semicolons to separate stages and vary transitions according to whether steps are sequential or additional.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “extract its juice,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator” and “sugar crystals.” These terms make the manufacturing stages understandable, and “mechanically” and “manually” efficiently distinguish the harvesting methods. There are, however, some spelling and word-choice inaccuracies, including “untill,” “continously,” “transfered,” “centriguge” and “pakaging.” A few expressions are also imprecise: “specialised machines” is less specific than the diagram’s mechanical harvester, and “thick cane syrup” adds a description not shown. Aim for accurate spelling of technical terms and choose wording that reports the diagram rather than adding unsupported detail. The vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but precision and control are not yet consistent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex structures, including the overview sentence and the clause “where sugar crystals separates from syrup.” The sequence is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “sugar canes grown” needs a passive form (“are grown”), and “until it reaches maturity” has unclear agreement because the subject is plural. There are also article and agreement problems in “in a evaporator,” “crystals separates” and “syrup are dried.” The long opening process sentence needs clearer punctuation to separate the growing period from harvesting. These errors rarely prevent understanding, but they reduce accuracy. Practise passive constructions for process descriptions, check singular and plural agreement, and divide linked stages into complete, correctly punctuated sentences.

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