Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pictorial representations depict the information about the how sugar is produced from sugar cane.

To commence with the process of sugar, firstly, sugar canes are grew from 12 to 18 months in the field then sugar canes are ready for harvested by hands as well as machine after the cultivation sugar canes are crushed by juicer machine for extract the juice. Thereafter, juice is purified with the help of limestone filter.

Moving a head with the remaining details, after the filteration juice converted into syrup by using evaporated method. In the sixth step, centrifuge fan separated sugar crystals from syrup. Finally, after drying and cooling procedure sugar is ready to use.

Overall, it is evident that there are total seven steps in the whole process which start with growing and last with drying as well cooling.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, including the 12–18-month growing period, harvesting by hand or machine, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. Your overview also identifies the seven-stage sequence and its beginning and end. However, some details are less fully reported: for example, the diagram shows juice becoming syrup in an evaporator using heat, while “evaporated method” is vague, and the final product is sugar rather than simply sugar “ready to use.” The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Add a little more precise description of how the stages connect and what happens to the juice and syrup to develop the summary more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph covering the early stages, another for later stages, and a concluding overview. The sequence is generally easy to follow, and transitions such as “Thereafter,” “Moving ahead,” and “Finally” help signal progression. However, some linking phrases feel mechanical or do not clearly express the relationship between stages; “Moving ahead with the remaining details” is wordy, and “after the filteration” refers awkwardly to the previous step. The overview comes after the detailed account, so the reader receives the process summary late. A clearer overview near the beginning, followed by grouped stages and simpler, more precise transitions, would make the progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “crushed,” “purified,” “limestone filter,” “syrup,” and “centrifuge,” which makes the stages understandable. There are also attempts at more specific terms, such as “cultivation” and “centrifuge fan,” though the latter is not the right description for the equipment shown. Some word choices and forms are inaccurate or unnatural: “pictorial representations” is unnecessarily elaborate, “juicer machine” is imprecise for a crusher, and “filteration” is misspelled. “Evaporated method” also does not name the equipment or process naturally. Prefer standard process terms and check spelling and collocations; this would make the description more precise without requiring a much wider vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the reader can generally understand the sequence. However, some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “sugar canes are grew” should use a passive form such as “sugar cane is grown,” while “ready for harvested” needs a different structure, such as “ready to be harvested.” In “for extract the juice,” the verb form after “for” is incorrect, and “juice converted into syrup” is missing an auxiliary verb. The long sentence beginning “To commence with the process” also joins several stages without clear punctuation. Practise accurate passive constructions and divide long sequences into controlled sentences.

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