Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The process of preparing sugar from sugarcane is demonstrated in the diagram.

Overall, it is evident that the process consists of seven different stages, which begins by growing sugarcane and ends by drying and cooling step.

The process of making sugar commences by growing sugarcane plants. After 12-18 months, sugarcane plants are properly grown and it is harvested either by a labour or by a harvesting machine. Once all the sugarcane plants are harvested it is transferred to the crushing stage where sugarcane juice is prepared from the raw sugarcane plant.

To add further, the prepared sugarcane juice is purified in a limestone filter to remove all the impurities. At the fifth step of the process, the filtered juice is heated in an evaporator by providing external heat to convert juice into a syrup. The syrup is further centrifuged to separate sugar crystals from the syrup. Hence, the separated sugar crystals are dried out and cooled to get sugar as a final product.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response covers the full process and gives a clear overview: it identifies seven stages, from growing sugar cane to drying and cooling, and includes the 12–18-month growing period and both harvesting methods. The later stages are also accurately described, including limestone filtration, evaporation into syrup, centrifuging, and the final product. This selection of key features makes the account complete and well supported. To strengthen it further, make the overview more precise: “ends by drying and cooling step” is awkward and does not explicitly state that sugar is the final product. You could also clarify that the crusher extracts juice from the cane, rather than saying juice is “prepared from” the plant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information is arranged in a clear sequence, with an introductory sentence, an overview, and two paragraphs that follow the stages from cultivation through processing. Linking expressions such as “After 12-18 months,” “Once,” and “At the fifth step” help the reader track the process, while “Hence” signals the final outcome. The progression is easy to follow throughout. Some transitions are slightly formulaic, particularly “To add further,” and the overview’s ending is not expressed smoothly. More direct links between stages, such as “The resulting juice is then purified,” would make cohesion more natural and reduce reliance on signposting phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

The response uses a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “harvested,” “crushing stage,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “centrifuged,” and “sugar crystals.” These terms allow the stages to be described with reasonable precision, and the language is varied enough to avoid excessive repetition. A few choices are less natural or precise: “properly grown” is unnecessary for describing maturity, “prepared” is vague for the juice extracted by crushing, and “dried out” is less appropriate than the standard process term “dried.” “To add further” is also an awkward linking phrase. Choosing more exact collocations would make the description sound more fluent and technically appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

There is a useful mix of simple and complex sentences, including time clauses (“After 12-18 months”) and a purpose clause (“to separate sugar crystals from the syrup”). Most sentences are clear, and the sequence is generally expressed with good control. A few grammatical issues remain. In the overview, “the process consists of seven different stages, which begins” has a subject–verb agreement error; use “which begin” or recast the sentence. “It is harvested” also shifts from plural “plants” to a singular pronoun, and “it is transferred” has the same unclear number reference. The phrase “ends by drying and cooling step” is missing an article. Checking agreement, reference, and articles would improve accuracy.

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