Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrates the proccess of producing sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the process consists of 7 stages, beginning with the growing of sugar cane ending with the production of sugar, which is packed in a bag to deliver warehouse.

Start with the sugar cane which take 12-18 months to gorwing, after that harvestor cut from the roots and send to crusher machine. This step make a juice of sugar cane by crushing and then purifiying it to make a healthy and clear of dust. By the help of Limestone filter, sugar cane juice filtered.

In the next stage, evaporator conver juice into syrup by heating process and send next stage which is near to make sugar. After that, centrifuge comes here to seprate a crystal from syrup whish is unhealthy for human. In the final stage we have a sugar in drying and cooling container who preserve a sugar for further assesment like packed and testing for used.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the process as having seven stages and give a relevant overview from growing sugar cane to producing sugar. The main sequence is mostly covered, including harvesting, crushing, filtering, evaporation and centrifuging. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the diagram shows harvesting by either machine or hand, but your account mentions only a harvester; it does not show sugar being packed, tested or sent to a warehouse. The claim that the syrup is separated from something “unhealthy for human” is also unsupported. To strengthen the response, describe the final drying and cooling stage accurately and avoid adding purposes or outcomes that are not shown. The process is addressed, though some stages are less fully and precisely reported than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs that move through the early and later stages. Sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “after that,” “In the next stage,” and “In the final stage” help the reader follow the process. This logical progression is a strength. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, particularly “send next stage which is near to make sugar,” and the long final sentence combines drying, storage, packing and testing without clear relationships. Use more precise transitions and divide complex stage descriptions into complete sentences. Clearer references to the material at each stage would also make the progression smoother and reduce ambiguity.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use several relevant process terms, including “crusher,” “Limestone filter,” “evaporator,” “syrup” and “centrifuge,” which help convey the stages. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “proccess,” “purifiying,” “seprate,” and “assesment” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “make a healthy and clear of dust” and “near to make sugar.” Aim for accurate process collocations and avoid unsupported descriptions such as calling the syrup unhealthy. A more controlled range of verbs—such as “extract,” “filter,” “heat” and “separate”—would make the account clearer and more appropriate to an academic process description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the overall sequence can generally be understood. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to cause difficulty in places. For example, “the sugar cane which take 12-18 months to gorwing” has problems with agreement and the verb pattern, while “This step make a juice” also has subject–verb agreement and article errors. The opening overview lacks a clear connector between “beginning” and “ending,” and “In the final stage we have a sugar” is not a well-formed process description. Practise accurate passive forms, which are useful for describing processes, and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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