Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram illustrates the whole process of producing sugar from sugarcane.

Overall, it involves seven different steps from growing crop to the collection of end product such as; growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, centrifuge, and drying.

Firstly, sugarcane is cultivated, which takes up to 12-18 months to grow completely. The crop is then harvested by using two techniques i.e. by hand or by using machines. The collected sugarcanes were then crushed to extract all the juice, which was later filtered by using a limestone filter in order to purify it.

The purified juice was then heated in a evaporator, the water from the juice evaporated and the liquid juice was converted into syrup. Sugar crystals were then separated from the syrup by using the process of centrifugation. These crystals turned into sugar after drying and cooling them.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from cultivation through to drying and cooling, and include the key growing period and both harvesting methods. The overview identifies the seven-step sequence, while the body explains how cane becomes juice, syrup and finally sugar. However, some details are less fully reported: for example, the centrifuge is named, but its function of separating sugar crystals from syrup could be stated more explicitly. The phrase “collection of end product” is also vague, and the response is 13 words below the required minimum. Add a little more precise process detail, such as the limestone filter’s role and the final product, to make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview and a chronological account of the process. Sequencing expressions such as “Firstly,” “then” and “later” help the reader follow the stages, and the progression from harvesting to the finished sugar is easy to understand. This is already a coherent structure, with paragraphs serving appropriate purposes. Some linking is slightly mechanical, however, and the overview’s list largely repeats the stages rather than highlighting how the process transforms cane into sugar. The semicolon after “such as” also interrupts the flow. Use a more informative overview and connect related stages with varied, precise transitions to make cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of process vocabulary, including “cultivated,” “extract,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator” and “centrifugation.” These terms make the stages understandable, and the response generally communicates the process clearly. Some choices are imprecise or awkward, such as “collection of end product,” “grow completely” and “all the juice”; “sugarcane” and “sugarcanes” are also used inconsistently. The phrase “by using two techniques” is understandable but less natural than describing two harvesting methods. Aim for more accurate collocations and consistent naming of the crop and product. More precise wording would help you report the diagram’s technical details without relying on broad or informal expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including the relative clause “which takes up to 12-18 months” and passive constructions such as “was then heated” and “were then crushed.” Most sentences are understandable, and the sequence of actions is clear. Some grammatical errors remain: “in a evaporator” needs the article “an,” and “such as;” incorrectly combines a phrase with a semicolon. Tense is also inconsistent in “The collected sugarcanes were then crushed” after the present-tense description “is cultivated”; keep the process consistently in the present passive. The final sentence’s “after drying and cooling them” has an unclear reference for “them.” Check articles, punctuation and consistent tense, while retaining your varied sentence structures.

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