Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagram illustrates the produsing proccess for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, it is clear that in the proccess include seven steps to making sugar cane.

Regarding, 12 to 18 months require to produce sugar canes in the garden. Then, the second step is harvesting the sugar cane with the machine and by the farmer. Followed by, the sugar cane is crushing from the crushing machine and get jusice from this. According to the diagram the next stem is purifying juice with the limestone filter. The next step is add juice in the tenk and cook on the fire and juice become syrup. The six step is seprates the sugar crystals from syrup through the object. The last step in the procedgure is drying the suger and then cooling that. At last, the sugar come in the its final position.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the process as making sugar from sugar cane and mention several key stages, including the 12–18-month growing period, two harvesting methods, crushing, purification, evaporation, separation, and drying and cooling. However, the overview is unclear: “seven steps to making sugar cane” misstates the product and does not summarise the process’s overall progression. Some stages are described imprecisely, such as saying juice is “cook[ed] on the fire” rather than explaining that heat evaporates it into syrup, and the centrifuge is referred to only as “the object.” The response is also 9 words below the required minimum. To address the task more fully, give a clear overview and explain the key transformations accurately, using the available space to develop the stages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the diagram’s general sequence, and the separate opening, overview, and process paragraph help the reader recognise its basic structure. Sequencing expressions such as “Then,” “the next step,” and “The last step” also signal order. However, these links are repetitive and sometimes awkwardly attached: “Followed by, the sugar cane…” and “According to the diagram the next stem…” interrupt the flow. The overview does not clearly prepare the reader for the detailed account, and the final sentence, “At last, the sugar come in the its final position,” repeats the preceding ending without adding information. Use a clearer overview, connect stages with varied and accurate transitions, and avoid repeating the final outcome.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “syrup,” and “sugar crystals,” so the reader can identify many stages. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand: “produsing,” “proccess,” “jusice,” “seprates,” and “suger.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “in the garden,” “the object,” and “final position.” Choose specific terms from the diagram—for example, “field,” “centrifuge,” and “final product”—and check spelling carefully. More accurate process collocations, such as “the cane is crushed” and “the juice is purified,” would make the description clearer and more appropriate for this task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sequences, and the reader can usually infer the intended order. However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and agreement sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “in the proccess include seven steps” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “12 to 18 months require to produce sugar canes” has an incorrect verb pattern. In “the sugar cane is crushing,” the passive form is not correctly formed; “the sugar cane is crushed” would be appropriate. There are also problems in “the sugar come in the its final position.” Practise accurate passive structures for process descriptions and build complete sentences around each stage before attempting longer linked sentences.

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