Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The illustration gives information about the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the production of sugar from sugar cane is divided in 7 steps. First three steps is to growing, harvesting and crushing and the last four steps is to purifying, evaporating, seperate crystals and drying and cooling.

It is quite evident from the diagram that to produce sugar from sugar cane, first thing is to keep sugar cane in growing for (12 to 18 months). After growing sugar cane it would be harvest by machine or by hand and than crushing sugar cane to get juice. When the juice is obtained than it goes to purifying in limestone filter. After purification this juice is used in evaporator to become syrup. Juice heated on evaporator for a long time and when it becomes syrup it centrifuge and here in centrifuge it separates sugar crystals from this syrup and than the last step is to drying and cooling this syrup.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The overview also usefully groups the first three and final four stages, and you identify both harvesting methods and the limestone filter. This gives the reader a clear account of the process. Some details are less fully or accurately described: the final stage dries and cools the sugar, not “this syrup,” and the diagram does not specify that heating occurs “for a long time.” To strengthen the response further, keep each description closely tied to the visual and make the overview more precise about the transformation from cane to sugar crystals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and a chronological description of the process. Sequencing expressions such as “First,” “After,” and “After purification” help the reader follow the stages. However, the overview and the detailed paragraph repeat some information, and the repeated “than” and “when” links make the progression feel mechanical. Some references are also unclear: “this syrup” at the end suggests syrup is dried and cooled, rather than the sugar crystals. Use a wider range of precise transitions and refer explicitly to the material at each stage. Separating the process into shorter sentences would also make the sequence easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “manufacturing process,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the stages. The range is adequate for describing this diagram, but several word choices and forms are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “it would be harvest” is not a natural way to describe the harvesting stage, while “it centrifuge” does not clearly express the separation process. “Growing” and “crushing” are repeated without much variation, and “keep sugar cane in growing” is awkward. Choose precise process verbs and use the diagram’s terminology consistently, such as “is harvested,” “is crushed,” and “the centrifuge separates the crystals from the syrup.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including time and sequence clauses such as “After growing sugar cane…” and “when it becomes syrup…”. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to read. Examples include “First three steps is,” “the last four steps is,” and “it would be harvest”; these need plural agreement and passive forms. The long final sentence also joins several stages without clear grammatical boundaries. Practise forming accurate passive clauses for processes—for example, “The cane is harvested, crushed, and the juice is purified”—and check subject–verb agreement. More controlled sentence boundaries would improve clarity.

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