Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The diagram depicts the manufacturing process of making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall, the raw material goes through seven stages to become the final product. In addition, different steps include various environments like farming and laboratory experiments.

It is evident that a sugar cane plant takes 12 to 18 months of time period to reach maturity. Farmers and industrial owners then harvest the crop and takes it to the huge crusher, which crushes the sugar cane to filter out the juice. A limestone filter purifies that juice and brings it to the evaporator, where the furnance thickens the juice and converts it into a syrup. The chamber of centrifugation spins hardly and seperates the sugar crystals from the syrup. At the end, those crystals are transfered to the storage room to dry and cool before being sold commercially.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the process as having seven stages and include the key sequence from growing sugar cane through crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and drying and cooling. The 12–18-month growing period is also reported accurately. However, some details are unclear or unsupported: the diagram shows harvesting by either machine or hand, not specifically by “farmers and industrial owners,” and it does not show the crystals being taken to a storage room or sold commercially. The overview’s reference to “various environments like farming and laboratory experiments” is also not grounded in the diagram. The response is 12 words below the required minimum, which limits the development of the process description. Cover both harvesting methods and describe only the stages shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction, a brief overview, and a chronological account of the stages. Sequencing expressions such as “Overall,” “then,” and “At the end” help the reader follow the process, and the stages are generally presented in the correct order. This coherent progression is a strength. However, the overview’s mention of “farming and laboratory experiments” does not clearly connect to the process, and the final sentence adds storage and commercial sale, disrupting the otherwise diagram-based progression. The body is also compressed, with several stages packed into one paragraph and little separation between the harvesting, crushing, and purification details. Use a focused overview and develop the sequence in clearer, connected steps.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of process vocabulary, including “purifies,” “evaporator,” “syrup,” “centrifugation,” and “sugar crystals,” which allows the main stages to be understood. There are also attempts at more specific wording, such as “raw material” and “final product.” However, some choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this diagram: “laboratory experiments” does not describe the purification stage, “spins hardly” is not an appropriate collocation, and “storage room” and “sold commercially” introduce details not shown. Spelling errors such as “furnance,” “seperates,” and “transfered” also reduce accuracy. Prefer precise process terms and check spelling; for example, describe the centrifuge as spinning rapidly to separate crystals from syrup.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause “where the furnance thickens the juice” and the time clause “before being sold commercially.” Most of the process remains understandable, and the sequence is conveyed through generally complete sentences. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “Farmers and industrial owners then harvest the crop and takes it,” the plural subject requires “take.” The phrase “12 to 18 months of time period” has an awkward article and noun construction; “12 to 18 months to mature” would be clearer. “A sugar cane plant” is also less natural as a general reference than “sugar cane takes.” Aim for consistent subject–verb agreement and more controlled phrasing while retaining varied sentence structures.

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