Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The picture illustrates the manufacturing process,how sugar is produced from sugar cane.

Overall, beging of the growing sugar canes in farm for months to harvesting. They are than use diffrent process in machine. They used various cemical in making suger.

Process is start from growing in farms for 12 to 18 moths of periods. onece sugar cane are growing it is croping through two diffrent ways one is by humans hand and second from machines. After than suger cane crushing in machine where juice is proceess into limestone filter were they purifying jucies.

Onece jucie is clean they going to in a heat machine where juice become syrup due to avaporator. Syrup then under go in another process centrifuge, where its separates suger crystals from syrups. Last process is dring and cooling the suger crystals and sugar become raedy for use. All of take a few time to manifacturing procdcts.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the main stages in the correct order, from growing the cane for 12–18 months through harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation, centrifuging, and final drying and cooling. You also identify the two harvesting methods and explain that the juice becomes syrup before sugar crystals are separated. The overview attempts to summarise the process, but it is unclear and includes an unsupported claim that chemicals are used; the diagram specifically shows a limestone filter. Some details are also imprecise, such as saying the sugar is ready for use, which is not stated. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the linear process and describe the role of each stage accurately, without adding information not shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is divided into an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs describing the stages, so the reader can follow the broad sequence. The stages are generally presented in the right order, and transitions such as “After than” and “Last process” signal progression. However, these linking phrases are often awkward or repetitive, and some references are unclear—for example, “They are than use diffrent process in machine” does not clearly identify what “they” refers to. The overview also repeats information rather than providing a distinct summary. Use clearer sequencing language such as “Next” and “Finally,” and make each sentence’s subject explicit to improve the flow between stages.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushing,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator,” and “centrifuge,” which helps communicate the diagram’s subject. However, the range and control are limited by repeated basic wording such as “process” and “machine,” and several spelling errors make the text less clear, including “suger,” “jucie,” and “manifacturing.” Some word choices are also inaccurate or unnatural: “croping” is not the right term for harvesting sugar cane, and “various cemical” is unsupported by the diagram. Aim for precise process verbs and accurate collocations, such as “the cane is crushed” and “the juice is purified through a limestone filter.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a relative clause in “where its separates suger crystals from syrups.” However, grammatical control is weak: several sentences have faulty verb forms or missing auxiliaries, as in “Process is start” and “they going to in a heat machine.” Agreement and articles are also inconsistent, for example “sugar cane are growing” and “in farms.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, particularly the comma splice in the opening sentence and the run-on construction “Onece jucie is clean they going to…” These errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to follow. Practise forming clear passive process sentences, such as “The juice is heated until it becomes syrup.”

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