Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This diagram illustrates the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Overall,sugar manufacturing is a man made process which consisting on seven main stages.The process starting from growing sugar canes and ended up with the drying and cooling the sugar. This process include Harvesting, Crushing,Purifying juice and drying sugar.

Sugar canes takes almost 12 to 28 months for growing sugar canes that its a time to harvest, this process is doing by a man or a tractor. Man load sugar canes into tractor with the help of machine. Then sugar canes crushed by a machine and convert into a liquid form and then added into the limestone filter.which helps to purifying the juice.

Now its time to convert juice into a syrup with the help of evaporator machine and then it put on the heat.Whereas the sugar crystals separated from the syrup in centrifuge.At the end sugar is ready after drying and cooling process.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the process as having seven stages and give a relevant overview from growing the cane to drying and cooling the sugar. The main sequence is mostly covered, including harvesting, crushing, purification, evaporation and centrifuging. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the diagram gives a growing period of 12–18 months, not “12 to 28 months,” and it does not show a man loading cane into a tractor. The explanation of the centrifuge and final drying stage is also brief. The response is 146 words, four words below the required minimum, which limits the detail you can provide. Add accurate process details and explain the separation and finishing stages more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction and overview are followed by two paragraphs describing the stages. The process is generally presented in sequence, and words such as “Then,” “Whereas” and “At the end” help signal movement through it. However, progression is sometimes difficult to follow because several stages are compressed into long sentences, and the link “Whereas” does not express the intended relationship between evaporation and centrifuging. Punctuation also creates breaks in the flow, as in “filter.which.” To improve, give each group of stages a clear sentence, use accurate sequencing links such as “Next” and “After this,” and separate the overview from the detailed account more clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant process vocabulary, including “harvesting,” “crushed,” “limestone filter,” “evaporator” and “centrifuge,” so the reader can recognise most stages. The range is nevertheless limited, with repeated use of “process,” “sugar canes” and “juice,” and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate. For example, “man made process” is not a suitable description of a manufacturing sequence, while “convert into a liquid form” is less precise than describing the cane juice being extracted. “Man load sugar canes into tractor” also misrepresents the harvesting methods shown. Aim for precise process verbs and avoid repeating the same nouns when a clear reference is possible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors are frequent in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “which consisting on seven main stages,” “The process starting,” “Sugar canes takes,” and “it put on the heat.” These should be recast with accurate forms, such as “which consists of seven stages,” “The process starts,” “Sugar cane takes,” and “it is heated.” Some sentences also join several actions without clear grammatical control, particularly the final paragraph. Practise accurate present-simple passive forms for process descriptions, and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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